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The society would benefit from a ban o all forms of advertising because it serves no useful purpose, and can even be damaging. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the opinion? v.2

The society would benefit from a ban o all forms of advertising because it serves no useful purpose, and can even be damaging. with the opinion? v. 2
Advertising is a sign of our times; it is everywhere. from my public to my private life, from SMS messages on my phone to the back of toilet door, to TV screens in the supermarkets, on the streets and in elevators. But does it ever serve a purpose other than to tell me how pitiful my life is without a certain product? Advertising might be like medicine; not nice but necessary from time to time. When we want to buy a new computer or go on a holiday, some of us will do two things; do some online research and then check out the best deals online or in the paper. This works for us; we get the right information at the right time. And we are grateful. On another day, we may be strolling in the street with our friends enjoying the sunshine, but then a large TV screen jumps into life telling us the merits of a certain shampoo, or a certain car model. This is intrusive, distracting and perhaps even dangerous as it makes vision in the street more difficult. But advertising pay for things that I enjoy; it pays for the TV programmes I watch, the TV screens that help me pass the time on the public transport system, and subsidizes the newspaper I read online. It, however, does seem that sometimes there is too much, that it is too pervasive and too intrusive. But to completely eliminate it from our everyday life would be an unwise decision. We have to live with it, but maybe some respect for the consumers might be nice.
Advertising is a
sign
of our
times
; it is everywhere.
from
my public to my private
life
, from SMS messages on my phone to the back of toilet door, to TV screens in the supermarkets, on the streets and in elevators.
But
does it ever serve a purpose other than to
tell
me how pitiful my
life
is without a certain product?

Advertising might be like medicine; not nice
but
necessary from
time
to
time
. When we want to
buy
a new computer or go on a holiday,
some
of us will do two things; do
some
online research and then
check
out the best deals online or in the paper. This works for us; we
get
the right information at the right
time
. And we are grateful.

On another day, we may be strolling in the street with our friends enjoying the sunshine,
but
then a large TV screen jumps into
life
telling us the merits of a certain shampoo, or a certain car model. This is intrusive, distracting and perhaps even
dangerous
as it
makes
vision in the street more difficult.

But
advertising pay for things that I enjoy; it pays for the TV
programmes
I
watch
, the TV screens that
help
me pass the
time
on the public transport system, and subsidizes the newspaper I read online.

It,
however
, does seem that
sometimes
there is too much, that it is too pervasive and too intrusive.
But
to completely eliminate it from our everyday
life
would be an unwise decision. We
have to
live
with it,
but
maybe
some
respect for the consumers might be nice.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay The society would benefit from a ban o all forms of advertising because it serves no useful purpose, and can even be damaging. with the opinion? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
268 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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