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It is observed that most government pay lot of money for art project for instance, there are more and more paintings and sculpture seen in public places. Some people think that it is wrong and government should spend money on other important thing. v.2

It is observed that most government pay lot of money for art project for instance, there are more and more paintings and sculpture seen in public places. Some people think that it is wrong and government should spend money on other important thing. v. 2
It is a topic of debate that higher authorities is spending lot of money on art. In public places there are many sculpture paintings can be seen, for instance; However, it is believed by other masses that despite pay expenditure on art government should spend money on other imparative things. I partially agree with this notion and money should be spent equally on art and other important things such as education. One the one hand, there are an ample number of reasons why authorities should spent capital on art and one of them is employment. What i mean to say is that person who has great skills of hand paintings they can get a job to make pictures in public places and can earn higher. As a result, unemployment will eliminate. Moreover, sculpture pictures enhance the beauty of nation. Many tourist visited every day in nation and when they see great photos on places they influence from them and then they tell to their friends. On the other hands, there are plethora of factors why government pay attention towards other sectors and one of them is eliminated the poverty in country. In other words, government should open schools for priviller families who can not afford children' s' school fee. One day that children will get jobs and get good salary package. Therefor, in future there will not any poor. Furthermore, government should pay money stadiums to promote sports for better health. Nowadays, obesity is common and being overweight can cause a number of health problems, which lead to heart problem and diabetes and if every town has a sport stadium people can do workout there and fight against overweight. In conclusion, although sculpture paintings are important for country, government should spent money on other sectors.
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many
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by
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other
masses that despite pay expenditure on
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art
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government
should spend
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money
on
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other
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imparative
things. I
partially
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agree
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should
be spent
equally
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art
and
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other
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important
things such as education.

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the one hand, there are an ample number of reasons why authorities should
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spent
capital on
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art
and one of them is employment. What
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i
mean to say is that person who has great
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skills
of hand paintings they can
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get
a job to
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make
pictures in public places and can earn higher.
As a result
, unemployment will eliminate.
Moreover
, sculpture pictures enhance the beauty of nation.
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Many tourist
visited every day in nation and when they
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see
great photos on places they influence from
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them and
then they
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tell
to their friends.

On the
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other
hands, there are plethora of factors why
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government
pay attention towards
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other
sectors and one of them
is eliminated
the poverty in country. In
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other
words,
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government
should open schools for
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priviller
families who can not afford
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s&
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get
jobs and
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get
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good
salary package. Therefor, in future there will not any poor.
Furthermore
,
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government
should pay
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money
stadiums to promote sports for better health. Nowadays, obesity is common and being overweight can cause a number of health problems, which lead to heart problem and diabetes and if every town has a sport stadium
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
can do workout there and fight against overweight.

In conclusion
, although sculpture paintings are
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important
for country,
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government
should
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spent
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money
on
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other
sectors.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay It is observed that most government pay lot of money for art project for instance, there are more and more paintings and sculpture seen in public places. Some people think that it is wrong and government should spend money on other important thing. v. 2

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4 paragraphs
295 words
6.0
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