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The society would benefit from a ban o all forms of advertising because it serves no useful purpose, and can even be damaging. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the opinion? v.1

The society would benefit from a ban o all forms of advertising because it serves no useful purpose, and can even be damaging. with the opinion? v. 1
Tourists these days are showing an interest in visiting places with harsh conditions. For some people travelling to such places will be a unique experience because it is not something you get to experience in your day-to-day life. However, there are some downsides to this kind of trips because they might compromise people’s health and fitness. This essay will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of visiting dangerous or offbeat locations. Visiting a place that could pose a threat to your life may be exciting for some travellers and this feeling could actually enhance your appreciation for life and health. People are amazed by the sort of scenery and landscape that they might find in isolated places untouched by humans. This allows them to find a connection with their inner self. Witnessing the wonders of the nature also allows people to find a new purpose in life and look at the world in a different light. Also, for some people travelling to uninhabited and peaceful places could improve their health in several ways. For example, in 2016, the University Of Cambridge reported that people who lived for a month in the Brazilian Jungle improved their sight by sixty percent in comparison to those who lived their regular life in the city. On the other hand, travelling to locations with difficult conditions might create a problem to those tourists who are mentally weak or addicted to technology. The feeling of isolation could make them feel homesick and they may get depressed and cut the trip short before visiting the best parts. To illustrate, a survey done by The Institute of Tourism in Africa showed that almost twenty-five percent of tourists crossing the Sahara desert did not finish the tour because they were feeling isolated and the conditions were too extreme for them. As a result, they had to be evacuated by an emergency helicopter. To conclude, exploring places that have an uncommon condition could be a positive trip for some people looking for a spiritual experience or a health improvement. However, for those who are afraid of losing their comfort zone and the connection with the 21st century, this kind of excursion might be a disappointing idea due to the facilities that these places lack.
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places
with harsh conditions. For
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some
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people
travelling to such
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places
will be a unique experience
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because
it is not something you
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get
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life
.
However
, there are
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some
downsides to this kind of trips
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because
they
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compromise
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people’s
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health
and fitness. This essay will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of visiting
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dangerous
or offbeat locations.

Visiting a
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place
that could pose a threat to your
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life
may be exciting for
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some
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travellers
and this feeling could actually enhance your appreciation for
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life
and
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health
.
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People
are amazed
by the sort of scenery and landscape that they
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might
find in isolated
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places
untouched by humans. This
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allows
them to find a connection with their inner self. Witnessing the wonders of the nature
also
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allows
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people
to find a new purpose in
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life
and look at the world in a
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different
light.

Also
, for
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some
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people
travelling to uninhabited and peaceful
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places
could
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improve
their
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health
in several ways.
For example
, in 2016, the
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University Of Cambridge
reported that
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people
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who
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lived
for a month in the Brazilian Jungle
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improved
their sight by sixty percent
in comparison
to those
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who
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lived
their regular
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life
in the city.

On the other hand
, travelling to locations with difficult conditions
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might
create a problem to those tourists
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who
are mentally weak or addicted to technology. The feeling of isolation could
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make
them feel
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homesick and
they may
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get
depressed and
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cut
the trip short
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before
visiting the best parts. To illustrate, a survey done by The Institute of Tourism in Africa
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showed
that almost twenty-five percent of tourists crossing the Sahara desert did not finish the tour
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because
they were feeling isolated and the conditions were too extreme for them.
As a result
, they had to
be evacuated
by an emergency helicopter.

To conclude
, exploring
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places
that have an uncommon
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condition
could be a
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positive
trip for
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some
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people
looking for a spiritual experience or a
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health
improvement.
However
, for those
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who
are afraid of losing their comfort zone and the connection with the 21st century, this kind of excursion
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might
be a disappointing
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idea
due to the facilities that these
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places
lack.
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IELTS essay The society would benefit from a ban o all forms of advertising because it serves no useful purpose, and can even be damaging. with the opinion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
374 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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