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Write a letter to your local council that the road in front of your house is damaged In your letter you should tell him your name and where you are living describe the problem suggest what you want him to do for it v.1

Write a letter to your local council that the road in front of your house is damaged In your letter you should tell him your name and where you are living describe the problem suggest what you want him to do for it v. 1
In modern society, there has been a major concern that many couples have delayed parenthood. In my opinion, I consider that parent’s decision to give birth in the later stage of life can bring about more advantages for the family when compared to minor drawbacks that it might bring. Despite the drawbacks mentioned below, I believe the benefits gained by the late childbirth are extremely useful for the whole family. The primary reason why a number of individual want have children later this choice allows them to have more time to find their passion and have fun when they are young. For instance, it is easier for a young couple to travel when they do not have baby to nurture. An additional reason is that people who are at an early stage of their career usually have lower income compare to when they are older. Therefore, many people decide to start raising a family after having accumulated enough money to ensure a better future for their children. Admittedly, there are some issues involved when people want to have children in their middle age. One problem is that it has some detrimental effects on the society, this tendency might affect family life as having children later will cause a significant age gap between two generations and makes it harder for parents to understand and communicate with their offspring. Another negative aspect is that if people give birth when they are too old, the babies being born might be physically less healthy. This might adversely affect the quality of the future workforce if too many people decide to follow this trend. In conclusion, although tourists can have certain negative effects, it has an extremely positive influence on the economy as parents prefer having children in later stage because they want to improve their career and enjoy their social life.
In modern society, there has been a major concern that
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many
couples have delayed parenthood. In my opinion, I consider that parent’s decision to give birth in the
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later
stage of life can bring about more advantages for the
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family
when compared to minor drawbacks that it
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might
bring.

Despite the drawbacks mentioned below, I believe the benefits gained by the late childbirth are
extremely
useful for the whole
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family
. The primary reason why a number of individual
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want have
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children
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later
this choice
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allows
them to have more time to find their passion and have fun when they are young.
For instance
, it is easier for a young couple to travel when they do not have baby to nurture. An additional reason is that
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people
who are at an early stage of their career
usually
have lower income compare to when they are older.
Therefore
,
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many
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people
decide to
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start
raising a
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family
after having accumulated
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enough
money to ensure a better future for their children.

Admittedly
, there are
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some
issues involved when
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people
want to have
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children
in their middle age. One problem is that it has
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some
detrimental effects on the society, this tendency
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might
affect
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family
life as having
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children
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later
will cause a significant age gap between two generations and
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makes
it harder for parents to understand and communicate with their offspring. Another
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negative
aspect is that if
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people
give birth when they are too
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old
, the babies
being born
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might
be
physically
less healthy. This
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might
adversely
affect the quality of the future workforce if too
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many
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people
decide to follow this trend.

In conclusion
, although tourists can have certain
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negative
effects, it has an
extremely
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positive
influence on the economy as parents prefer having
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children
in
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later
stage
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because
they want to
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improve
their career and enjoy their social life.
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IELTS essay Write a letter to your local council that the road in front of your house is damaged In your letter you should tell him your name and where you are living describe the problem suggest what you want him to do for it v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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