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The responsibility for protecting and reducing global environmental damage lies with politicians as there is very little that the individual can do this. Do you agree or disagree? v.2

The responsibility for protecting and reducing global environmental damage lies with politicians as there is very little that the individual can do this. v. 2
Nowadays, environment is becoming the hottest and most concerned global issue with many arguments about the responsibility for protecting and reduce environmental damage belonging to the authority or the individual. There is a statement that the politicians are responsible for resolving this problem, meanwhile, the citizens cannot do this. I am opposed to this statement because the environmental issue is just resolved completely with the accompanying of both. The role of the authorities in protecting the environment is introducing policies preventing non-eco-friendly activities. In many countries, especially in developed ones, governments have a law to limits the emissions from industrial activities. Moreover, they impose “green taxes” on products of many companies and some services such as travelling. Therefore, thanks to these policies, the amount of polluted gases is reduced and stable in the limitation. In addition, government campaigns can raise awareness of individuals about protecting the environment. In general, policies have strong positive effects on settling this big issue. That is not to say this responsibility only belongs to the politicians, meanwhile, the personal activities also have negative impacts on the environment. The individuals can protect the surroundings through many effective ways. Firstly, people may change their daily habits such as using organic foods replaced for chemical ones, recycling plastic items and using water and electricity economically. Using public transports instead of private ones is also a good way to reduce the emissions that individuals can do. These activities can reduce the amount of polluted substances released per day and preserve natural resources, therefore, play an important role in the environmental protection. Secondly, the consumers can show their roles in not buying any products of companies that are proven not eco-friendly, resulting in these company having to change the way of producing to more friendly with environment. Moreover, citizens may report to the authorities about activities causing pollution near their living areas. Conclusion, the responsibility for the environmental problems belongs to both the politicians and the individuals. In some cases, individuals do not have permissions enough to resolve problems so the role of government is necessary. That is not to say the government should be blame for totally, instead of that, people should change their habits to more eco-friendly.
Nowadays,
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environment
is becoming the hottest and most concerned global issue with
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many
arguments about the responsibility for protecting and
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reduce
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environmental
damage belonging to the authority or the
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individual
. There is a statement that the politicians are responsible for resolving this problem, meanwhile, the citizens cannot do this. I
am opposed
to this statement
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because
the
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environmental
issue is
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just
resolved completely with the accompanying of both.

The
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role
of the authorities in protecting the
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environment
is introducing policies preventing
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non-eco-friendly
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activities
. In
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many
countries,
especially
in developed
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ones
,
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governments
have a law to limits the emissions from industrial
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activities
.
Moreover
, they impose “green taxes” on products of
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many
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companies
and
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some
services such as travelling.
Therefore
, thanks to these policies, the amount of polluted gases is
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reduced
and stable in the limitation.
In addition
,
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government
campaigns can raise awareness of
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individuals
about protecting the
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environment
.
In general
, policies have strong
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positive
effects on settling this
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big
issue.

That is
not to say this responsibility
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only
belongs to the politicians, meanwhile, the personal
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activities
also
have
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negative
impacts on the
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environment
. The
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individuals
can protect the surroundings through
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many
effective ways.
Firstly
,
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people
may
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change
their daily habits such as using organic foods replaced for chemical
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ones
, recycling plastic items and using water and electricity
economically
. Using public transports
instead
of private
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ones
is
also
a
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good
way to
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reduce
the emissions that
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individuals
can do. These
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activities
can
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reduce
the amount of polluted substances released per day and preserve natural resources,
therefore
, play an
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important
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role
in the
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environmental
protection.
Secondly
, the consumers can
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show
their
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roles
in not buying any products of
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companies
that
are proven
not eco-friendly, resulting in these
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company
having to
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change
the way of producing to more friendly with
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environment
.
Moreover
, citizens may report to the authorities about
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activities
causing pollution near their living areas.

Conclusion, the responsibility for the
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environmental
problems belongs to both the politicians and the
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individuals
. In
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some
cases,
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individuals
do not have permissions
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enough
to resolve problems
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so
the
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role
of
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government
is necessary.
That is
not to say the
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government
should be blame for
totally
,
instead
of that,
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people
should
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change
their habits to more eco-friendly.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay The responsibility for protecting and reducing global environmental damage lies with politicians as there is very little that the individual can do this. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
369 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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