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The preventing and reducing global environmental damage lies with politicians, as there are very little the individuals can do about this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

The preventing and reducing global environmental damage lies with politicians, as there are very little the individuals can do about this problem. v. 1
Today climate change has become a reality and there are widespread changes in different ecosystems around the world. Environmental changes have far reaching consequences than we can possibly imagine and all these changes can potentially jeopardize the existence of many species of animals and plants. Some people believe that these problems can only be solved by lawmakers and individuals cannot contribute significantly to alter the course of these changes. I would disagree with this opinion, as there are a number of ways by which a single person can contribute. Policy makers in governments are responsible for introducing laws which can be implemented and can have a greater impact on many things in their respective jurisdictions. For instance, they can introduce environment friendly laws which discourage the production of pollutants from many of the industries in their countries. Government support can have a great effect on environmental preservation and protection. Many of the large scale preservation changes happened from either partial or complete support of the governments of those regions. However, our planet is made up of individual beings and if we start changing things individually we can have mass effect. People in their individual capacities can contribute to environmental preservation by adopting healthy practices. For example, a person can make sure their waste goes to a proper disposal site by dropping it at a specified garbage pickup site. Many of the countries have democratic governments running the countries. People can have the option to vote for the politicians with climate protection in their agendas and this in turn can have far reaching consequences. In conclusion, i would say that individuals can have significant contribution when it comes to policy making and personal responsibility with respect to climate changes. People these days have far more say in government policies than ever before and all individual efforts combine to become a large scale collective effort which can help us a great deal in ridding our planet with this menace.
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Today
climate
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change
has become a reality and there are widespread
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changes
in
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different
ecosystems around the world. Environmental
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changes
have
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far reaching
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consequences than
we can
possibly
imagine and all these
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changes
can
potentially
jeopardize the existence of
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many
species of animals and plants.
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Some
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people
believe that these problems can
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only
be solved
by lawmakers and
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individuals
cannot contribute
significantly
to alter the course of these
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changes
. I would disagree with this opinion, as there are a number of ways by which a single person can contribute.

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Policy makers
in
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governments
are responsible for introducing laws which can
be implemented
and can have a greater impact on
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many
things in their respective jurisdictions.
For instance
, they can introduce environment friendly laws which discourage the production of pollutants from
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many
of the industries in their countries.
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Government
support can have a great effect on environmental preservation and protection.
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Many
of the large scale preservation
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changes
happened from either partial or complete support of the
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governments
of those regions.

However
, our planet
is made
up of
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individual
beings and if we
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start
changing things
individually
we can have mass effect.
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People
in their
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individual
capacities can contribute to environmental preservation by adopting healthy practices.
For example
, a person can
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make
sure their waste goes to a proper disposal site by dropping it at a specified garbage pickup site.
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Many
of the countries have democratic
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governments
running the countries.
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People
can have the option to vote for the politicians with climate protection in their agendas and this in turn can have
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far reaching
consequences.

In conclusion
,
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i
would say that
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individuals
can have significant contribution when it
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comes
to policy making and personal responsibility with respect to climate
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changes
.
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People
these days have far more say in
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government
policies than ever
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before
and all
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individual
efforts combine to become a large scale collective effort which can
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help
us a great deal in ridding our planet with this menace.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay The preventing and reducing global environmental damage lies with politicians, as there are very little the individuals can do about this problem. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
327 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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