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Specific responsibility of reducing and preventing global environmental damage lies with politicians as there is little that individuals can solve this problem. Agree or disagree? v.1

Specific responsibility of reducing and preventing global environmental damage lies with politicians as there is little that individuals can solve this problem. Agree or disagree? v. 1
Many people traditionally held the view that politicians, especially the Government has the essential responsibility to protect the social surroundings as well as prevent any damages can be naturally caused. Although I think in some cases, it is true, I disagree that the number of individuals who are trying to reduce and prevent global environmental damage is small. In one word, I agree politicians have a great responsibility towards the environment. Firstly, having an impact on their citizens, the Government can typically impose a law forcing people to voluntarily reduce the using of plastic bags. Besides, they can provide two rubbish bins instead of one, so that their citizens may know how to correctly classify domestic waste. By doing this, our environment will soon be cleaner. Secondly, the Government should also limit noxious emissions eliminated from factories. This might be a good solution in the long term. On the other hand, I also support the view that today, many individuals are trying their best to protect the environment. It can be seen that non-government organization are taking more care of environmental issue: They encourage many people who are living near them to use public transport as much as possible to release the harmful carbon dioxin into the air. Because politicians are busy working, these organizations will be the representative that directly raise society's awareness even change their style of using social media. For example, Ecosia, a search engine based in Berlin, Germany, donated 80% or more of its profits to non-profit organizations that focus on reforestation. Workers in this company are not politicians, but they believe it also has a similar responsibility to protect the habitat. In conclusion, while I hold the view that politicians like the Government response to reduce and prevent global environmental damage, individuals like citizens or local non-government organizations also play a key role.
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people
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held the view that
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politicians
,
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Government
has the essential responsibility to protect the social surroundings
as well
as
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prevent
any damages can be
naturally
caused. Although I
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think
in
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some
cases, it is true, I disagree that the number of individuals who are trying to
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reduce
and
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prevent
global environmental damage is
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small
.

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agree
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politicians
have a great responsibility towards the environment.
Firstly
, having an impact on their citizens, the
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Government
can
typically
impose a law forcing
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people
to
voluntarily
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reduce
the using of plastic bags.
Besides
, they can provide two rubbish bins
instead
of one,
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so
that their citizens may know how to
correctly
classify domestic waste. By doing this, our environment will
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soon
be cleaner.
Secondly
, the
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Government
should
also
limit noxious emissions eliminated from factories. This might be a
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good
solution in the long term.

On the other hand
, I
also
support the view that
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today
,
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many
individuals are trying their best to protect the environment. It can be
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seen
that non-
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government
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organization
are taking more care of environmental issue: They encourage
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many
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people
who are living near them to
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use
public transport as much as possible to release the harmful carbon dioxin into the air.
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Because
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politicians
are busy working, these
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organizations
will be the representative that
directly
raise society's awareness even
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change
their style of using social media.
For example
,
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Ecosia
, a search engine based in Berlin, Germany, donated 80% or more of its profits to non-profit
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organizations
that focus on reforestation. Workers in this
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company
are not
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politicians
,
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but
they believe it
also
has a similar responsibility to protect the habitat.

In conclusion
, while I hold the view that
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politicians
like the
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Government
response to
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reduce
and
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prevent
global environmental damage, individuals like citizens or local non-
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government
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organizations
also
play a key role.
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IELTS essay Specific responsibility of reducing and preventing global environmental damage lies with politicians as there is little that individuals can solve this problem. Agree or disagree? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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