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The range and quality of food that we can buy has changed because of technological and scientific advances. Some people regard this change as an improvement, while others believe that it is harmful. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

The range and quality of food that we can buy has changed because of technological and scientific advances. Some people regard this change as an improvement, while others believe that it is harmful. v. 1
Buying a car is increasing year by year, while other transports´ options are introduced and supported by government. The market of sells´ automobile still gaining influence with new laws and encouraging people to get other transports to their routine. Thus, I highly agree that I would be a way to reduce millions of vehicles on roads and plus that the increased the bad quality of air in the environment. Alternative types of transport are needed immediately because the excessive number of cars negatively impacts the environment and people's health, but preventing people from buying and owning cars is certainly not the answer. Own a car always means independence, power, and comfort. Some governments like in Brazil years ago gave to Industry of automobiles, some subsidy in tax and it represented an influence of the market and increased sells. For instance, Brazil is a huge country and more machine on the street means more harmful, while the Government was giving power to the industry they were not thought of other ways to how the poor people would use urban mobility. Furthermore, the Big city in Brazil as Rio de Janeiro e São Paulo has Subways, train and bus, but the Bicycle as option of transportation just was introduced and regulated a few years ago, and just in Big cities. However, a positive form to help the planet and encourage the population to use more alternative ways of transport, would be more advertise, marketing, a plan to avoid agglomeration on the rush time and more laws to help the cities, a good example of a city who support alternative transport is Holland, there are more bicycles than car and the council of Amsterdam appreciate this. To sum up, I wish to reiterate that it is considerable impracticable an increase of vehicle in the last years and something needs to be done to hold it and the pollution and it is reasonable the use of laws and alternative forms of transports.
Buying a
car
is increasing
year
by
year
, while other
transports´
options
are introduced
and supported by
government
. The market of sells´ automobile
still
gaining influence with new laws and encouraging
people
to
get
other
transports
to their routine.
Thus
, I
highly
agree
that I would be a way to
reduce
millions of vehicles on roads and plus that the increased the
bad
quality of air in the environment.
Alternative
types of
transport
are needed
immediately
because
the excessive number of
cars
negatively
impacts the environment and
people
's health,
but
preventing
people
from buying and owning
cars
is
certainly
not the answer.

Own
a
car
always means independence, power, and comfort.
Some
governments
like in Brazil years ago gave to Industry of automobiles,
some
subsidy in tax and it represented an influence of the market and increased sells.
For instance
, Brazil is a huge country and more machine on the street means more harmful, while the
Government
was giving power to the industry they were not
thought
of other ways to how the poor
people
would
use
urban mobility.

Furthermore
, the
Big
city in Brazil as Rio de Janeiro e São Paulo has Subways, train and bus,
but
the Bicycle as option of transportation
just
was introduced
and regulated a few years ago, and
just
in
Big
cities.

However
, a
positive
form to
help
the planet and encourage the population to
use
more
alternative
ways of
transport
, would be more advertise, marketing, a plan to avoid agglomeration on the rush time and more laws to
help
the cities, a
good
example of a city who support
alternative
transport
is Holland, there are more bicycles than
car
and the council of Amsterdam appreciate this.

To sum up, I wish to reiterate that it is considerable impracticable an increase of vehicle in the last years and something needs to
be done
to hold it and the pollution and it is reasonable the
use
of laws and
alternative
forms of
transports
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay The range and quality of food that we can buy has changed because of technological and scientific advances. Some people regard this change as an improvement, while others believe that it is harmful. v. 1

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328 words
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