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The qualities and skills that a person requires to become successful in today’s world cannot be learned at a university or any other academic institution. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

The qualities and skills that a person requires to become successful in today’s world cannot be learned at a university or any other academic institution. v. 3
Today, there are diverse skills and qualities which foster success in any person’s chosen path. Some people argue that such skills and qualities cannot be learnt at a university or any other academic institution. In my opinion, some skills must be learnt at an academic university while others can be developed without an academic influence. We must acknowledge that in order to be successful in certain career fields, a background university education is a prerequisite. In the medical industry, medical doctors are required to spend a number of years in the tertiary institution gaining background knowledge which is critical to attaining a thriving medial career. It is currently impossible to obtain a medical license as a practicing doctor without an education in medicine. Nevertheless, there are some skills which drive success that are not gained in a university. Certain skills such as diligence, honestly, being innovative, disciplined and assertiveness are usually developed during a person’s career. It is more often than not built through career experiences and once mastered, will foster success and meritorious rewards. For example, an individual who is innovative and diligent will be perceived as a personal of value which will lead to rapid career growth. Therefore, I will opine that whether a skill or quality can be learnt in a university will depend on the type of skills and the career path. Success can be attained through a vast number of skills and qualities developed in and out of the university. In conclusion, this essay has shown that the skills required to be successful are vast and can be learnt in and out of the university.
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success
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person’s
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cannot be
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university
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learnt at
an academic
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university
while others can
be developed
without an academic influence.

We
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must
acknowledge that in order to be successful in certain
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career
fields, a background
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university
education is a prerequisite. In the medical industry, medical doctors
are required
to spend a number of years in the tertiary institution gaining background knowledge which is critical to attaining a thriving medial
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career
. It is
currently
impossible to obtain a medical license as a practicing doctor without an education in medicine.

Nevertheless
, there are
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some
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skills
which drive
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success
that are not gained in a
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university
. Certain
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skills
such as diligence,
honestly
, being innovative, disciplined and assertiveness are
usually
developed during a person’s
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career
. It is more
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often
than not built through
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career
experiences and once mastered, will foster
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success
and meritorious rewards.
For example
, an individual who is innovative and diligent will
be perceived
as a personal of value which will lead to rapid
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career
growth.

Therefore
, I will opine that whether a
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skill
or
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quality
can be
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learnt
in a
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university
will depend on the type of
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skills
and the
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career
path.
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Success
can
be attained
through a vast number of
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skills
and
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qualities
developed in and out of the university.

In conclusion
, this essay has shown that the
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skills
required to be successful are vast and can be
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learnt
in and out of the
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university
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay The qualities and skills that a person requires to become successful in today’s world cannot be learned at a university or any other academic institution. v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
270 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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