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Having a good university degree guarantees people a good job. To what extent do you agree? v.2

Having a good university degree guarantees people a good job. v. 2
One of the highly contentious issues today relates to whether a job can be secured by obtaining a degree from university or is it the work experience that one should prefer to gain. In this essay, I strongly accord to the view that unless a degree is awarded by university, a job is not guaranteed. Besides, both opinions will be expatiated upon in greater detail and a reasoned conclusion will be reached. On one side of the argument, people argue that the merits of having a degree from university outweigh the disadvantages. The main reason for this is because careers such as: medicine, nursing and dentistry etc. , can only be taught in university. Furthermore, it is also possible to say that a degree from university is important as it is a prerequisite to getting a lucrative job. For instance, big companies like A. G Leventis and Nestle only accept applicants who have a university degree. On the other hand, while this side of the debate has some valid viewpoints, the opposing case can also be made. People also argue that not all kinds of jobs require a university degree; they believe jobs that deal with machines are hardly taught in detail, in the university. A good illustration of this is a study carried out by a professor at Harvard University. His findings revealed that 40% of engineering graduates lack the practical skills required for doing their jobs. In addition to this, it is not uncommon for us to find people holding a university degree but being without a job. In fact, a recent survey in Australia found that over 50% of unemployed youth have a university degree. After having discussed the pertinent points of this issue, I am inclined to the opinion that a degree from university is a necessity to procuring a profitable job.
One of the
highly
contentious issues
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today
relates to whether a
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job
can
be secured
by obtaining a
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degree
from
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university
or is it the work experience that one should prefer to gain. In this essay, I
strongly
accord to the view that unless a
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degree
is awarded
by
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university
, a
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job
is not guaranteed.
Besides
, both opinions will
be expatiated
upon in greater detail and a reasoned conclusion will
be reached
.

On one side of the argument,
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people
argue that the merits of having a
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degree
from
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university
outweigh the disadvantages. The main reason for this is
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because
careers such as: medicine, nursing and dentistry etc.
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,
can
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only
be taught
in
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university
.
Furthermore
, it is
also
possible to say that a
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degree
from
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university
is
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important
as it is a prerequisite to getting a lucrative
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job
.
For instance
,
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big
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companies
like A. G
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Leventis
and Nestle
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only
accept applicants who have a
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university
degree.

On the other hand
, while this side of the debate has
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some
valid viewpoints, the opposing case can
also
be made
.
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People
also
argue that not all kinds of
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jobs
require a
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university
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degree
; they believe
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jobs
that deal with machines are hardly taught in detail, in the
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university
. A
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good
illustration of this is a study carried out by a professor at Harvard
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University
. His findings revealed that 40% of engineering graduates lack the practical
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skills
required for doing their
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jobs
.
In addition
to this, it is not uncommon for us to find
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people
holding a
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university
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degree
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but
being without a
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job
. In fact, a recent survey in Australia found that over 50% of unemployed youth have a
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university
degree.

After having discussed the pertinent points of this issue, I
am inclined
to the opinion that a
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degree
from
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university
is a necessity to procuring a profitable
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job
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Having a good university degree guarantees people a good job. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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