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The plan below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. v.1

The plan below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. v. 1
Today, the media has a great impact on society and it is less likely to shun away from the influence. This trend has several cons and pros. The major advantage of media rich society is that people can reach recent news immediately and early. Compared to the past ages, today people can aware of the news two or three times faster. For example, until the invention of telephone and morse codes the main communication means were letters. Even in rudimentary ages sparrow used as a postman in order to deliver news. On the other hand, despite the advantage mentioned above, sometimes media can be the main factor of chaos and misunderstandings. Some media channels deliberately distort the truth for increasing rates. Moreover, websites use captivating headlines to attract more interest despite most of the headlines entirely unrelated with the given news. The other disadvantage of modern media is advertising policies. There is so much advertisement all around us and most of them trying to persuade us to buy the things which we really do not really need. Additionally, some advertisement companies use sexuality in order to be seen more appealing and attractive. But such companies did not consider that this advertisement method has a negative impact on child's standpoint about morality. In conclusion, modern media play an important role to get information rapidly, but at the same time misusing of media platforms might lead to undesirable consequences.
Today
, the
media
has a great impact on society and it is less likely to shun away from the influence. This trend has several cons and pros.

The major advantage of
media
rich society is that
people
can reach recent news immediately and early. Compared to the past ages,
today
people
can aware of the news two or three times faster.
For example
, until the invention of telephone and
morse
codes the main communication means were letters. Even in rudimentary ages sparrow
used
as a postman in order to deliver news.

On the other hand
, despite the advantage mentioned above,
sometimes
media
can be the main factor of chaos and misunderstandings.
Some
media
channels
deliberately
distort the truth for increasing rates.
Moreover
, websites
use
captivating headlines to attract more interest despite most of the headlines
entirely
unrelated with the
given
news. The other disadvantage of modern
media
is advertising policies. There is
so
much advertisement all around us and most of them trying to persuade us to
buy
the things which we
really
do not
really
need.
Additionally
,
some
advertisement
companies
use
sexuality in order to be
seen
more appealing and attractive.
But
such
companies
did not consider that this advertisement method has a
negative
impact on child's standpoint about morality.

In conclusion
, modern
media
play an
important
role to
get
information
rapidly
,
but
at the same time misusing of
media
platforms might lead to undesirable consequences.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay The plan below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
237 words
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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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