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Emotional machines function according to the principles of emotional intelligence (EQ). Examples include robots and computers that have the ability to mimic emotions. They can also interpret and respond to people’s emotional states. Affective computing de v.1

Emotional machines function according to the principles of emotional intelligence (EQ). Examples include robots and computers that have the ability to mimic emotions. They can also interpret and respond to people’s emotional states. Affective computing de v. 1
There are two views about some queries which are asked by employers from employees about personal information, for example their passion in terms of advantages and relationship. Personally, I believe that the benefits of this method do outweigh the drawbacks. Actually, asking questions of people who intend to work in a position is the best way for employers in order to find that interviewees can do some assignments in terms of hardship, tolerance, and so on, these are the things employers would definitely be fascinated by. Furthermore, through this way they can recognize the interest of employees so as to consider a relevant position for them. What is more, if employers have some information about employees they can prepare some facilities for them and also stimulate them to do their workloads in terms of quality and work productivity as well. On the other hand, some people have the opinion that this matter is futile. In fact, companies and offices need some essential information of people, such as work experience, education, skills, and so on. These people may think that personal information is a privacy or worthless for employers. Moreover, they do not like to care about people who apply for jobs, in fact, they only expect to see the results of work and also efficiency. In conclusion, in my view, all employers should ask personal information from employees to make a harmonious atmosphere for them due to improvements in jobs and also produce motivation for workers.
There are two views about
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some
queries which
are asked
by
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employers
from
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employees
about personal
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information
,
for example
their passion in terms of advantages and relationship.
Personally
, I believe that the benefits of this method do outweigh the drawbacks.

Actually, asking questions of
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people
who intend to
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work
in a position is the best way for
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employers
in order to find that interviewees can do
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some
assignments in terms of hardship, tolerance, and
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so
on, these are the things
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employers
would definitely
be fascinated
by.
Furthermore
, through this way they can recognize the interest of
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employees
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so as to
consider a relevant position for them.
What is more
, if
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employers
have
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some
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information
about
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employees
they can prepare
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some
facilities for them and
also
stimulate them to do their workloads in terms of quality and
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work
productivity
as well
.

On the other hand
,
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some
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people
have the opinion that this matter is futile. In fact,
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companies
and offices need
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some
essential
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information
of
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people
, such as
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work
experience, education,
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skills
, and
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so
on. These
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people
may
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think
that personal
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information
is a privacy or worthless for
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employers
.
Moreover
, they do not like to care about
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people
who apply for jobs, in fact, they
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only
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expect
to
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see
the results of
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work
and
also
efficiency.

In conclusion
, in my view, all
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employers
should ask personal
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information
from
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employees
to
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make
a harmonious atmosphere for them due to improvements in jobs and
also
produce motivation for workers.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Emotional machines function according to the principles of emotional intelligence (EQ). Examples include robots and computers that have the ability to mimic emotions. They can also interpret and respond to people’s emotional states. Affective computing de v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
246 words
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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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