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The chart below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six science related subjects at a UK university in 2009 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant v.1

The chart below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six science related subjects at a UK university in 2009
Technology has become a part of human life. Getting the fact that the world industry has changed into digital 4. 0, we can see that every connection and relationship could be reached by a digital platform in our pocket. Handphone, laptop, tablet, computer has now been essentials for people to connect.  Nowadays, it is often observed that some people tend to more engaged with their gadget rather than in real life. Even though the technology is beneficial for human, I argue that it can harm people in the contact they made through several digital media. Many fake accounts, hackers, and internet bullying can be found. As the development of technology is increasing day by day, people could easily get connected to the internet. This caused many people use this privilege to harm or fool others. For instance, in these days, there are lots of people doing "internet relationship" or "internet dating" and when they want to meet each other in the real life, the partner is gone missing. This action is not healthy for somebody mental health. Instead of fake accounts, there are lots of internet bullying that can happen in many forms. People in social media can easily make themselves as anonymous, as when they have an intend to attack someone, they have no worries to act any harmful thing. For example, there are several cases of bullies happen on Facebook. When I was a child, I was being one of the victims of vocal harassment in social media. And surely, cyber bullying is not good at all. The conclusion is the changing type of relationship that caused by technology is may be dangerous, even it brings many advantages. Parents should be more aware about their kids activity with technology to avoid such internet crime.
Technology
has become a part of human life. Getting the fact that the world industry has
changed
into digital 4. 0, we can
see
that every connection and relationship could
be reached
by a digital platform in our pocket.
Handphone
, laptop, tablet, computer has
now
been essentials for
people
to connect.  Nowadays, it is
often
observed that
some
people
tend to more engaged with their gadget
rather
than in real life.
Even though
the
technology
is beneficial for human, I argue that it can harm
people
in the contact they made through several digital media.
Many
fake accounts, hackers, and internet bullying can
be found
.

As the development of
technology
is increasing day by day,
people
could
easily
get
connected to the internet. This caused
many
people
use
this privilege to harm or fool others.
For instance
, in these days, there are lots of
people
doing
"
internet relationship
"
or
"
internet dating
"
and when they want to
meet
each other in the real life, the partner
is gone
missing. This action is not healthy for somebody mental health.

Instead
of fake accounts, there are lots of internet bullying that can happen in
many
forms.
People
in social media can
easily
make
themselves as anonymous, as when they have an
intend
to attack someone, they have no worries to act any harmful thing.
For example
, there are several cases of bullies happen on Facebook. When I was a child, I was being one of the victims of vocal harassment in social media. And
surely
,
cyber bullying
is not
good
at all.

The conclusion is the changing type of relationship that caused by
technology
is may be
dangerous
, even it brings
many
advantages. Parents should be more aware about their kids activity with
technology
to avoid such internet crime.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay The chart below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six science related subjects at a UK university in 2009

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
7
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