The pie chart below shows information about different types of pollutants entering in a particular area of ocean in 1997 and 2007 v.1
The pie chart below shows information about different types of pollutants entering in a particular area of ocean in 1997 and 2007 v. 1
Worldwide, every government shows more interest in protecting their arts and culture. Some people think that the government should focus on public services instead of spending in arts, music and theatres. I partially agree with this notion. Improving public services is essential to the county's growth; however, the arts also important.
Every year the government spends an enormous amount in arts, music and theatre attract tourists. Worldwide, most of the people interested to learn and experience various cultures and tradition, so each country all over the world tries to attract more tourist and earn from it. For example, to compare the past few decades, Iran's income has increased several times once they started investing in tourism. In addition, Iran's one-third of their income depends on tourism.
However, public services are taken into account first. In many countries, still, the people who live in rural places are struggling without proper education facility. Even in this modern era, a massive number of students are travelling so far to get educated. The regime should consider education issue on top of others because the country's growth relies on the number of educated people. For instance, according to the 2019 survey of Times, worldwide, 46% of children do not have proper education facilities. Hence, it is the sole responsibility of the government to provide an adequate education.
To conclude, although it is important to invest in arts, music and theatre, public services like education should consider the top of others. I believe, in the future, the bureaucracy will consider public services as the most priority and others will taken depends on the need.
Worldwide, every
government
shows
more interest in protecting their
arts
and culture.
Some
people
think
that the
government
should focus on
public
services
instead
of spending in
arts
, music and
theatres
. I
partially
agree
with this notion. Improving
public
services
is essential to the county's growth;
however
, the
arts
also
important
.
Every year the
government
spends an enormous amount in
arts
, music and
theatre
attract tourists. Worldwide, most of the
people
interested to learn and experience various cultures and tradition,
so
each country all over the world tries to attract more tourist and earn from it.
For example
, to compare the past few decades, Iran's income has increased several times once they
started
investing in tourism.
In addition
, Iran's one-third of their income depends on tourism.
However
,
public
services
are taken
into account
first
. In
many
countries,
still
, the
people
who
live
in rural places are struggling without proper
education
facility. Even in this modern era, a massive number of students are travelling
so
far to
get
educated. The regime should consider
education
issue on top of others
because
the country's growth relies on the number of educated
people
.
For instance
, according to the 2019 survey of Times, worldwide, 46% of children do not have proper
education
facilities.
Hence
, it is the sole responsibility of the
government
to provide an adequate education.
To conclude
, although it is
important
to invest in
arts
, music and
theatre
,
public
services
like
education
should consider the top of others. I believe, in the future, the bureaucracy will consider
public
services
as the most priority
and others
will taken depends on the need.
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