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Medical technology helps to live long life. Is that curse or blessing for society and mankind? v.1

Medical technology helps to live long life. Is that curse or blessing for society and mankind? v. 1
Families are the integral part of any civilization. And it's difficult to imagine families without children. However, in today's world, there a drastic increase in the number of couples opting not to have kids. With kids out of the equation, couple get to spend a lot of time with each other and they don't have to worry about all the stress of raising a child and they certainly don't have to be bothered about the expenses incurred to bring up a child. However, not having children has its own downsides like loneliness and lack of care during the old age. Raising children is a strenuous task. Not just physically, but mentally too. Children, especially in their infant stage require constant attendance and attention. And that continues even the post infant stage. Whether it may be getting them ready to school every day, cooking for them or helping them with their homework. One more important thing to consider when it comes to raising children is finances. Paying your kid's tuition, buying them clothes and other miscellaneous things costs a lot of money. Many parents usually work extra hard to provide their children a quality life. And not having kids will certainly relieve you of all these responsibilities. However, not having children has a downside too. When couples start to get older they will no longer have the same charm in their relationship like the way they had in the initial stages of it. Their company will no longer tend to excite them the way it used to. That is where children give meaning and purpose to the lives of parents. With children in the house, there will rarely be any dull moment. One more crucial we need to consider is people need assistance when they get older. They might need a helping hand in doing their daily chores, visiting hospitals or any activity that needs requires good physical condition and cognitive abilities, which usually decline as we get older. You can get a paid support to get these things done. But it lacks the warm and loving touch of your own children. The absence of children generally equates to absence of stress and worry of raising them. Absence of children also with a price like loneliness and lack of care in older age. One should carefully ponder over the pros and cons of having children before making up their mind.
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about the expenses incurred to bring up a child.
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children
has its
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own
downsides like loneliness and lack of care during the
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old
age.

Raising
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children
is a strenuous task. Not
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just
physically
,
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mentally too.
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,
especially
in their infant stage require constant attendance and attention. And that continues even the post infant stage. Whether it may be getting them ready to school every day, cooking for them or helping them with their homework. One more
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important
thing to consider when it
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comes
to raising
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children
is finances. Paying your kid's tuition, buying them clothes and other miscellaneous things costs
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a lot of
money.
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parents
usually
work extra
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hard
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a quality life. And not
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kids will
certainly
relieve you of all these responsibilities.

However
, not
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having
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children
has a downside too.
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start
to
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older
they will no longer have the same charm in their relationship like the way they had in the initial stages of it. Their
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company
will no longer tend to excite them the way it
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used
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where
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give meaning and purpose to the
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lives
of parents. With
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in the
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, there will rarely be any dull moment. One more crucial we
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people
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need
assistance when they
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get
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older
. They might
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need
a helping hand in doing their daily chores, visiting hospitals or any activity that
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needs
requires
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good
physical condition and cognitive abilities, which
usually
decline as we
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get
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older
. You can
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get
a paid support to
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get
these things done.
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it lacks the warm and loving touch of your
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own
children.

The absence of
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children
generally
equates to absence of
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stress
and worry of raising them. Absence of
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children
also
with a price like loneliness and lack of care in
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older
age. One should
carefully
ponder over the pros and cons of
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having
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children
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before
making up their mind.
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IELTS essay Medical technology helps to live long life. Is that curse or blessing for society and mankind? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
399 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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