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Some people think that criminals should be given longer terms in prison so as to reduce the crime rate To what extent do you agree or disagree v.1

Some people think that criminals should be given longer terms in prison so as to reduce the crime rate v. 1
It is believed by some individuals that, pupils do not need to do home assignments which given by their teachers. While other people, including me hold a view, the setting of home task is an essential part of education. On the one hand, there are some reasons why it is argued that teachers should not give homework for learners. The first one is that school hours have already been extended and stressful enough which puts their children have to spend most their time at school. Besides children need time to develop relationships with their family, their friends as well as for physical activities. Another reason is that studies have revealed that children can manage better to study by not doing homework on a regular basis. For instance, the number of pupils without doing homework, graduate from high school in Finland is higher rather than in the US. On the other hand, I would argue that assignments could bring a plenty of benefits to the schooling of the children. Firstly, there is no doubt that the act of doing homework is one of the best ways to revise the lessons because the process of applying theoretical knowledge into practice helps to enhance comprehension. For example, students those who study chemistry, mathematics and physics deal with a lot of theoretical tasks. By doing at home this tasks, learners could remember the formula more easily than expected and also those exercises would develop their independent studying habits and skills as they have to complete task alone at their own pace. These habits and skills would eventually play an essential part in their work as adults afterward. In conclusion, while there are some conflicting opinions about giving homework for school children. I believe that the benefits of practicing homework for outweigh the drawbacks in helping pupils gain knowledge and also develop an independent study habit in the long term.
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is believed
by
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some
individuals that, pupils do not need to do home assignments which
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given
by their teachers. While other
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people
, including me hold a view, the setting of home
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task
is an essential part of education.

On the one hand, there are
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some
reasons why it
is argued
that teachers should not give
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homework
for learners. The
first
one is that
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school
hours have already
been extended
and stressful
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enough
which puts their
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children
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have to
spend most their time at
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school
.
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Besides
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children
need time to develop relationships with their family, their friends
as well
as for physical activities. Another reason is that
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studies
have revealed that
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children
can manage better to
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study
by not
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doing
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homework
on a regular basis.
For instance
, the number of pupils without
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doing
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homework
, graduate from high
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school
in Finland is higher
rather
than in the US.

On the other hand
, I would argue that assignments could bring a
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plenty
of benefits to the schooling of the
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children
.
Firstly
, there is no doubt that the act of
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doing
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homework
is one of the best ways to revise the lessons
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because
the process of applying theoretical knowledge into practice
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helps
to enhance comprehension.
For example
, students those who
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study
chemistry, mathematics and physics deal with
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a lot of
theoretical
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tasks
. By
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doing
at home this
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tasks
, learners could remember the formula more
easily
than
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expected
and
also
those exercises would develop their independent studying habits and
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skills
as they
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have to
complete
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task
alone at their
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own
pace. These habits and
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skills
would
eventually
play an essential part in their work as adults afterward.

In conclusion
, while there are
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some
conflicting opinions about giving
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homework
for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
. I believe that the benefits of practicing
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homework
for outweigh the drawbacks in helping pupils gain knowledge and
also
develop an independent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
habit in the long term.
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IELTS essay Some people think that criminals should be given longer terms in prison so as to reduce the crime rate v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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