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Some people think that children should be taught at school to recycle materials and avoid waste. Other people believe that children should be taught this at home. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion. v.3

Some people think that children should be taught at school to recycle materials and avoid waste. Other people believe that children should be taught this at home. v. 3
Recycling materials is one of the task that children should teach in school to avoid waste. However, some people argue that it should be done at home already. To begin with, recycling of materials is a good task to learn by the children for them to be able to know on how to use the things that already recycled. Some people preferred to learn this task at home and parents should be the first trainer for their child. Young people would like to do this task because it is enjoyable and they can also share this to their friends and when they go to school they already know how to do it. Moreover, they have learned it in advanced at their home. On the other hand, despite of advanced teaching it at home children would not be interested anymore to learn this at school. For instance, children will not enjoy listening to the discussion about the topic because they know it already. Young individuals have a mindset that everything can learn at school. Indeed, they will not enjoy the group work with their classmate although they have an idea to the task. Young aged people would prefer to learn it with their school classmates because they can build up friendship and respect as well. To conclude, every task should be taught advanced at home but it is more likely taught and learn in school so that children could learn it with excitement and have fun to learn it with their classmates at school.
Recycling materials is one of the
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to avoid waste.
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argue that it should
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children
for them to be able to know on how to
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use
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at home and parents should be the
first
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people
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they already know how to do it.
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children
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because
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school
.
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idea
to the
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. Young aged
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people
would prefer to
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learn
it with their
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school
classmates
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because
they can build up friendship and respect
as well
.

To conclude
, every
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should
be taught
advanced at home
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but
it is more likely taught and
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in
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it with excitement and have fun to
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it with their classmates at
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11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that children should be taught at school to recycle materials and avoid waste. Other people believe that children should be taught this at home. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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