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Many of today's most urgent problems can only be solved through international cooperation. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

Many of today's most urgent problems can only be solved through international cooperation. v. 3
In modern world many countries are facing a lot of problems in different areas. International cooperation could be the best solution to solved the problematic situation of government. I am totally agree with this statement. Firstly, international collaboration is indeed need to solved all the urgent problems of each country. Government should set a fair law to lower the numbers of crimes across the world. There are many problems that our country have such as a high rate of crime innocent people could affect to any criminal acts. Another is corruption people always know that some government officials are corrupting the budget for the needs of country such as food, education and health care system. Next is global warming this is the most important topic of each leader of the country. Talk about how they can teach or educate the people to take care of the mother nature. On the other hand, some individuals are not agreeing that international Cooperation is needed to solved this kind of problem. They think that it is not the best way because leader of the government officials would only waste money just to attend the international meeting for the better of their country. Perhaps people do not believe that the problems facing the country has no any solution at all. To sum up, government leader across the world should be attentive in each other. This is not to grow the problem of countries facing and by educating the people to believe in them that they can do it. By passing also the evidence that they are working onto it.
In modern world
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many
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countries
are facing
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a lot of
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problems
in
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different
areas.
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International
cooperation could be the best solution
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to solved
the problematic situation of
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government
. I am
totally
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agree
with this statement.

Firstly
,
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international
collaboration is
indeed
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need
to solved all the urgent
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problems
of each
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country
.
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Government
should set a
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fair
law to lower the numbers of crimes across the world. There are
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many
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problems
that our
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country
have such as a high rate of crime innocent
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people
could affect to any criminal acts. Another is corruption
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people
always know that
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some
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government
officials are corrupting the budget for the needs of
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country
such as food, education and health care system.
Next
is global warming this is the most
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important
topic of each leader of the
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country
. Talk about how they can teach or educate the
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people
to take care of the mother nature.

On the other hand
,
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some
individuals
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are not agreeing
that
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international
Cooperation
is needed
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to solved
this kind of
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problem
. They
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think
that it is not the best way
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because
leader of the
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government
officials would
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only
waste money
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just
to attend the
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international
meeting for the
Use "best" if you mean to express an extreme with this adjective.
better
of their
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country
. Perhaps
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people
do not believe that the
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problems
facing the
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country
has
Did you mean "now" (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
no
any solution at all.

To sum up,
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government
leader across the world should be attentive in each other. This is not to grow the
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problem
of
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countries
facing and by educating the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to believe in them that they can do it. By passing
also
the evidence that they are working onto it.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Many of today's most urgent problems can only be solved through international cooperation. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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