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The only way to improve road safety is to give much stricter punishments on driving offenses. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.5

The only way to improve road safety is to give much stricter punishments on driving offenses. v. 5
Car accidents are increasing gradually in recent decades. In order to reduce traffic crimes, some people believe that stricter punishments should be implemented; however, I do think that it is not the only method to tackle the problem since there are other alternative measures which would be highly effective. A stricter law undoubtedly acts as a deterrent so that both motorcyclists and drivers will have to think twice before committing a driving crime. The full weight of law including serving a long prison sentence should be practically applied instead of just a fine or banning driving license. For example, there was a truck driver who was accused of being drunk and using heroin while driving hit and killed nearly 20 motorcyclists at an intersection in Long An City, Vietnam. He chose to crush 20 people than hitting himself into another truck since only by doing that could he stay alive. Therefore, stricter punishments are considered an effective way to punish who commit driving offenses. Although enacting a new law is recommended, there are numerous ways to solve the problem. Firstly, governments should invest money in installing speed cameras. Not until they realized that they are supervised do they control their speed. A lot of authorities worldwide have adopted this very cost-effective method. Secondly, it is necessary to conduct more regular vehicle inspections in order to avoid accidents caused by intoxicated drivers. Finally, education is a highly recommended solution which should be applied in schools. Consequently, the rate of teenagers who break driving laws will reduce significantly. From all the above-mentioned, the implementation of a stricter law is not the only measure to improve road safety. Commuters should be more careful when traveling to protect themselves and surrounding people as well.
Car accidents are increasing
gradually
in recent decades. In order to
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reduce
traffic crimes,
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some
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people
believe that
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stricter
punishments should
be implemented
;
however
, I do
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think
that it is not the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
method to tackle the problem since there are other alternative measures which would be
highly
effective.

A
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stricter
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law
undoubtedly
acts as a deterrent
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so
that both motorcyclists and drivers will
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have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
twice
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before
committing a
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driving
crime. The full weight of
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law
including serving a long prison sentence should be
practically
applied
instead
of
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just
a fine or banning
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
driving
license.
For example
, there was a truck driver who
was accused
of
being drunk
and using heroin while
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driving
hit and killed
nearly
20 motorcyclists at an intersection in Long An City, Vietnam. He chose to crush 20
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
than hitting himself into another truck since
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
by doing that could he stay alive.
Therefore
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stricter
punishments
are considered
an effective way to punish who commit
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
driving
offenses.

Although enacting a new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
law
is recommended
, there are numerous ways to solve the problem.
Firstly
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
should invest money in installing speed cameras. Not until they realized that they
are supervised
do they control their speed.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
A lot of
authorities worldwide have adopted this
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
cost-effective method.
Secondly
, it is necessary to conduct more regular vehicle inspections in order to avoid accidents caused by intoxicated drivers.
Finally
, education is a
highly
recommended solution which should
be applied
in schools.
Consequently
, the rate of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
teenagers
who break
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
driving
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laws
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
significantly
.

From all the above-mentioned, the implementation of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stricter
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
law
is not the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
measure to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
road safety. Commuters should be more careful when traveling to protect themselves and surrounding
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
as well
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay The only way to improve road safety is to give much stricter punishments on driving offenses. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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