The number of people working online from home has grown in some countries. What advantages and disadvantages can come of this trend? v.3
The number of people working online from home has grown in some countries. What advantages and disadvantages can come of this trend? v. 3
Nowadays, the question of whether extreme sports, like skydiving or skiing, should be banned or not, have been receiving a great deal of public attention. Although this prohibition appears plausible in some ways, extreme sports should be welcomed more.
On the one hand, there are several reasons why vigorous sports should be banned. First, since the inherently dangerous nature of these kinds of sports can threaten lives, it should not be allowed to people. In fact, participants are prone to suffering from unpredictably serious injuries, such as bone fractures or head trauma, which can be detrimental to their physical and mental health. Second, by taking part in these luxurious forms of sports, people have to pay a great amount of money. This means that entrance and insurance fees are prohibitively expensive, making them unaffordable to all people.
Nevertheless, risky sports has its unique benefits. First, since the original purpose of those sports is survival skills, which helps them to undergo appropriate training so that the dangers are minimised. For example, pilots will know how to parachute and if people live in heavy-snow countries, they will learn how to move in awful weather, which helps them to save people's lives. Second, since the proliferation of protective equipment, participants alleviate the possibility of accidents. For instance, the skier is armed with ski-bindings, hamlets or protective gear, which helps players to ensure little risks.
In conclusion, extreme sport has some existed drawbacks, the benefits would be more considered. By consolidating all mentioned pitfall, players can reap more great benefits and survival skills. 
Nowadays,  
the question of whether
 extreme  
sports
, like skydiving or skiing, should  
be banned
 or not, have been receiving a great deal of public attention. Although this prohibition appears plausible in  
some
 ways, extreme  
sports
 should  
be welcomed
 more.
On the one hand, there are several reasons why vigorous  
sports
 should  
be banned
.  
First
, since the  
inherently
  dangerous
 nature of these kinds of  
sports
 can threaten  
lives
, it should not be  
allowed
 to  
people
. In fact, participants are prone to suffering from  
unpredictably
 serious injuries, such as bone fractures or head trauma, which can be detrimental to their physical and mental health. Second, by taking part in these luxurious forms of  
sports
,  
people
  have to
 pay a great amount of money. This means that entrance and insurance fees are  
prohibitively
 expensive, making them unaffordable to all  
people
. 
Nevertheless
, risky  
sports
 has its unique benefits.  
First
, since the original purpose of those  
sports
 is survival  
skills
, which  
helps
 them to undergo appropriate training  
so
 that the  
dangers
 are  
minimised
.  
For example
, pilots will know how to parachute and if  
people
  live
 in heavy-snow countries, they will learn how to  
move
 in awful weather, which  
helps
 them to save  
people
's  
lives
. Second, since the proliferation of protective equipment, participants alleviate the possibility of accidents.  
For instance
, the skier  
is armed
 with ski-bindings, hamlets or protective gear, which  
helps
 players to ensure  
little
  risks
. 
In conclusion
, extreme  
sport
 has  
some
 existed drawbacks, the benefits would be more considered. By consolidating all mentioned pitfall, players can reap more great benefits and survival  
skills
. 
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