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Not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society? v.1

Not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society? v. 1
It is irrefutable that, nowadays, only a handful of students are interested in opting for science subjects for their tertiary education. This essay will discuss various reasons of this drift and its effect on the society. As these subjects require a high intellect level, are quite challenging and requires an extra effort to learn them, many average students do not consider pursuing them in future. They just try to get through science lessons till they are a compulsion, and opt out whenever they get the first chance to do so. Additionally, the structure of university teaching related to Science is quite feudal, and as a result, juveniles easily lose interest in these subjects. Owing to the emphasis given to the theoretical knowledge rather than practical, students finds these subjects quiet monotonous. A recent research conducted by the Cambridge University concluded that, many students do not consider a career in science stream because they feel that the lectures are boring and difficult to cope with. Owing to the current trend, the world will soon witness scarcity of young new researchers and doctors, and consequently, now new discoveries would be done in these streams. For instance, if a global pandemic break out in the coming future, we would require scientists, doctors and researchers for various reasons. Doctors would be needed to cure people and the scientists to find the vaccine of the deadly disease. If no one would be interested in studying science, we will see a downfall of such professions, and if, anytime in the future, such situation would occur, it would be difficult to cope, and ultimately the world would end. In conclusion, pupils are not interested in studying the concepts of science because many theories are quite complicated and tricky for many of them to understand. Moreover, the teachers also give more emphasis on theoretical knowledge than practical. If this trend continues, there would be less scientist and doctors, which would be a great problem for the entire world.
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only
a handful of
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students
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are
interested in opting for
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science
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subjects
for their tertiary education. This essay will discuss various reasons of this drift and its effect on the society.

As these
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subjects
require a high intellect level, are quite challenging and requires an extra effort to learn them,
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many
average
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students
do not consider pursuing them
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in future
. They
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just
try to
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get
through
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science
lessons till they are a compulsion, and opt out whenever they
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get
the
first
chance to do
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.
Additionally
, the structure of university teaching related to
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Science
is quite feudal, and
as a result
, juveniles
easily
lose interest in these
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subjects
. Owing to the emphasis
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given
to the theoretical knowledge
rather
than practical,
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students
finds these
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subjects
quiet monotonous. A recent research conducted by the Cambridge University concluded that,
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many
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students
do not consider a career in
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science
stream
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because
they feel that the lectures are boring and difficult to cope with.

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current
trend, the world will
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soon
witness scarcity of young new researchers and
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doctors
, and
consequently
,
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now
new discoveries would
be done
in these streams.
For instance
, if a global pandemic break out in the coming future, we would require scientists,
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doctors
and researchers for various reasons.
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would
be needed
to cure
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people
and the scientists to find the vaccine of the deadly disease. If no one would
be interested
in studying
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science
, we will
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see
a downfall of such professions, and if, anytime in the future, such situation would occur, it would be difficult to cope, and
ultimately
the world would
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end
.

In conclusion
, pupils are not interested in studying the concepts of
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science
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because
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many
theories are quite complicated and tricky for
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many
of them to understand.
Moreover
, the teachers
also
give more emphasis on theoretical knowledge than practical. If this trend continues, there would be less scientist and
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doctors
, which would be a great problem for the entire world.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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