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The number of people working online from home has grown in some countries. What advantages and disadvantages can come of this trend? v.2

The number of people working online from home has grown in some countries. What advantages and disadvantages can come of this trend? v. 2
Nowadays, working from home has spread up all over the world. More and more individuals are operating from their houses in some nations. This essay will discuss the positive and negative aspects of this fashion. The Office has no longer been the workplace since many people consider working online as a better alternative. This has saved time and the running cost for employees and employers respectively. Traffic jams are common, especially during rush hours and it wastes a lot of time which can be used to be productive at employment. In addition, businesses don’t need a bigger space, which is required to accommodate their workforce, which can cut the expenditures by a great deal. For example, most of the IBMs IT department operates in this way now. Hence, working remotely results in being more productive and profitable. Difficult communication is a drawback. In addition, it also causes security issues. Emailing and phone are the only modes of contact with someone who is distant and there can be signal issues sometimes. Important information is also subject to spread, which can be dangerous for any institute, because a home network system is not well secured. To illustrate, Amazon’s mode of business was leaked from one of its employer’s personal computers. Therefore, functioning from home can result in lack of knowledge transmission and safety threat. In conclusion, a growing number of people prefer to work remotely in a few nations. This essay discussed the benefits of this being less time consuming and more fruitful. It also debated the downsides, including communication barrier and security hazard.
Nowadays, working from home has spread up all over the world. More and more individuals are operating from their
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houses
in
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some
nations. This essay will discuss the
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positive
and
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negative
aspects of this fashion.

The Office has no longer been the workplace since
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many
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people
consider working online as a better alternative. This has saved time and the running cost for employees and employers
respectively
. Traffic jams are common,
especially
during rush hours and it wastes
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
time which can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to be productive at employment.
In addition
, businesses don’t need a bigger space, which
is required
to accommodate their workforce, which can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
the expenditures by a great deal.
For example
, most of the
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IBMs
IT department operates in this way
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now
.
Hence
, working
remotely
results in being more productive and profitable.

Difficult communication is a drawback.
In addition
, it
also
causes security issues. Emailing and phone are the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
modes of contact with someone who is distant and there can be signal issues
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
.
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Important
information is
also
subject to spread, which can be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
dangerous
for any institute,
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because
a home network system is not well secured. To illustrate, Amazon’s mode of business
was leaked
from one of its employer’s personal computers.
Therefore
, functioning from home can result in lack of knowledge transmission and safety threat.

In conclusion
, a growing number of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
prefer to work
remotely
in a few nations. This essay discussed the benefits of this being less
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time consuming
and more fruitful. It
also
debated the downsides, including communication barrier and security hazard.
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IELTS essay The number of people working online from home has grown in some countries. What advantages and disadvantages can come of this trend? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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