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People can eat a wide variety of food that can be grown in other areas. As a result, people can eat more food produced in other regions than local food. Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages? v.4

People can eat a wide variety of food that can be grown in other areas. As a result, people can eat more food produced in other regions than local food. Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages? v. 4
In these days, global food demand has aroused people’s discussion. However, the consumption of imported food has gained popularity and is considered an alternative to domestic food. My belief is that the positive aspects of this matter overlooked its drawbacks. To begin with, this trend certainly exerts some detrimental implications for the environment. First, since the act of transporting food from a country to another, requires frequent use of air planes, which are the most fuel-hungry means of transport in the world. This means that while foreign foods are transported into the world. This means that while foreign foods are transported and refrigerated to keep them fresh during the transporting process, thereby increasing global pollution from exhaust fumes. For example, Boeing 747 burns thousands of gallons per flight, such a huge amount of gasoline burnt highly detrimental to the atmosphere. Clearly, the negative impacts of oversea food have caused environmental damage. On the other hand, there some dazing advantages that can easily overshadow the demerits. By increasing the diversity of food, food produced in other regions provides customers with more options with exotic tastes and experiences that local people had not had previously. In fact, people these days from different countries are able to enjoy various kinds of products that are non-existent in their home countries. Moreover, many of the delicacies we like, several of which would appear in our tonight’s tables, are a mixture of ingredients indigenous to different parts of the world. Therefore, it would be a huge loss if we relied solely on local ingredients. In conclusion, while there are plus points to the merits of imported food, too much would be lost as a result. One should therfore weigh up the pros and cos and consider their priorities when deliberating whether or not to do
In these days, global
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food
demand has aroused
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people
’s discussion.
However
, the consumption of imported
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food
has gained popularity and
is considered
an alternative to domestic
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food
. My belief is that the
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positive
aspects of this matter overlooked its drawbacks.

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begin
with, this trend
certainly
exerts
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some
detrimental implications for the environment.
First
, since the act of transporting
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food
from a country to another, requires frequent
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use
of air
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planes
, which are the most fuel-hungry means of transport in the world. This means that while foreign
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foods
are transported
into the world. This means that while foreign
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foods
are transported
and refrigerated to
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keep
them fresh during the transporting process, thereby increasing global pollution from exhaust fumes.
For example
, Boeing 747 burns thousands of gallons per flight, such a huge amount of gasoline burnt
highly
detrimental to the atmosphere.
Clearly
, the
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negative
impacts of oversea
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food
have caused environmental damage.

On the other hand
, there
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some
dazing advantages that can
easily
overshadow the demerits. By increasing the diversity of
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food
,
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food
produced in other regions provides customers with more options with exotic tastes and experiences that local
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people
had not had previously. In fact,
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people
these days from
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different
countries are able to enjoy various kinds of products that are non-existent in their home countries.
Moreover
,
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many
of the delicacies we like, several of which would appear in our tonight’s tables, are a mixture of ingredients indigenous to
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different
parts of the world.
Therefore
, it would be a huge loss if we relied
solely
on local ingredients.

In conclusion
, while there are plus points to the merits of imported
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food
, too much would
be lost
as a result
. One should
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therfore
weigh up the pros and cos and consider their priorities when deliberating
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whether or not
to
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do
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay People can eat a wide variety of food that can be grown in other areas. As a result, people can eat more food produced in other regions than local food. Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
298 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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