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Some people say that supermarkets and manufactures have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on the products they sell. Others say that it is the responsibility of consumers to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.9

Some people say that supermarkets and manufactures have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on the products they sell. Others say that it is the responsibility of consumers to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging. v. 9
Nowadays, there is a huge concern about the environment as people have started realizing the negative impact of their actions on the planet. Plastic pollution is one of such issues which need to be dealt with quickly and effectively. According to some people, supermarkets should help to improve the situation by reducing the amount of packaging they use. Others insist that it is the duty of consumers to stay away from over-packaged products. Both views will be discussed in this essay. One the one hand, it is evident that supermarkets and manufacturers are the prime producers and promoters of the consumer goods; therefore they are the roots of this problem and by applying simple regulations over the manufacturing process, they can decrease the amount of packaging efficiency. Take milk bottles, for example. If supermarkets made them thinner or even replaced them with carton bottles, they would have a tremendous impact on the amount of plastic consumed. Thus, the argument that supermarkets should take responsibility to reduce over packaging certainly makes sense. On the other hand, satisfying people’s demands is the main job of the manufacturer. This means that the more people continue to purchase packaged products, the more they are produced. By contract, if people decided to cut their consumption of such products, there would be a definite reduction in their production. For instance, two years ago the government in the UK imposed a price on plastic bags in large supermarkets. This action decreased their consumption as well as production. Thus, consumers have a key role to play in tackling this issue. In conclusion, I believe that collaborative efforts should be taken by both the manufacturers and consumers to reduce pollution caused by excessive packaging.
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people
have
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started
realizing the
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negative
impact of their actions on the planet. Plastic pollution is one of such issues which need to
be dealt
with
quickly
and
effectively
. According to
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some
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people
, supermarkets should
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help
to
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improve
the situation by reducing the amount of
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packaging
they
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use
. Others insist that it is the duty of
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consumers
to stay away from over-packaged products. Both views will
be discussed
in this essay.

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the one hand, it is evident that supermarkets and manufacturers are the prime producers and promoters of the
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consumer
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goods
;
therefore
they are the roots of this problem and by applying simple regulations over the manufacturing process, they can decrease the amount of
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packaging
efficiency. Take milk bottles,
for example
. If supermarkets made them thinner or even replaced them with carton bottles, they would have a tremendous impact on the amount of plastic consumed.
Thus
, the argument that supermarkets should take responsibility to
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reduce
over
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packaging
certainly
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makes
sense.

On the other hand
, satisfying
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people’s
demands is the main job of the manufacturer. This means that the more
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people
continue to
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purchase
packaged products, the more they
are produced
. By contract, if
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people
decided to
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cut
their consumption of such products, there would be a
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definite
reduction in their production.
For instance
, two years ago the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
in the UK imposed a price on plastic bags in large supermarkets. This action decreased their consumption
as well
as production.
Thus
,
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consumers
have a key role to play in tackling this issue.

In conclusion
, I believe that collaborative efforts should
be taken
by both the manufacturers and
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consumers
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
pollution caused by excessive
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packaging
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people say that supermarkets and manufactures have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on the products they sell. Others say that it is the responsibility of consumers to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging. v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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