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The number of cars keeps increasing, so road systems should be expended. Some people think the government should pay for it, while others think car owners should pay for it. What’s your opinion? v.1

The number of cars keeps increasing, so road systems should be expended. Some people think the government should pay for it, while others think car owners should pay for it. What’s your opinion? v. 1
It is a controversial issue whether that spreading the roads is responsibility of higher authority or the owner's car. This essay will discuss both arguments before giving my opinion. To start with, there are multifarious reasons why the government should invest money to expend the roads. The predominant one is, public pay taxes to an administrator, which are used on the masses by providing public amenities to them such as- hospital, public transportation, schools and others more. To add more, the individuals also distribute money as a tool taxes, which helps to renovate and expand the roads. For example, in India, there are several tool plaza constructs in different cities that helpful to spread the roads. Therefore, the government have all the powers to manipulate the country. On the other hand, there are people who have opposing view that an individuals should pay for it. To illustrate, higher cost would encourage people to use public modes because of this several obstacles will mitigate. For example, traffic congestion and environmental hazards are taking birth due to usage of more cars for short and long distance, which leads to pollution and traffic jams. So, if the populace contribute finance for the betterment of roads then number of problems would be alleviated. Moreover, it would helpful for the government to invest taxes on education and health are. In conclusion, it is clearly evident that expanding the road system is need of the individuals and more cost should be met by the car owners and big companies, but an administrator also utilize some money for this purpose.
It is a controversial issue whether that spreading the
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roads
is responsibility of higher authority or the owner's car. This essay will discuss both arguments
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before
giving my opinion.

To
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start
with, there are multifarious reasons why the
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government
should invest money to expend the
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roads
. The predominant one is,
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public
pay taxes to an administrator, which are
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used
on the masses by providing
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public
amenities to them such as- hospital,
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public
transportation, schools
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and others
more. To
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add
more, the individuals
also
distribute money as a tool taxes, which
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helps
to renovate and expand the
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roads
.
For example
, in India, there are several tool plaza constructs in
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different
cities that helpful to spread the
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roads
.
Therefore
, the
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government
have all the powers to manipulate the country.

On the other hand
, there are
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people
who have opposing view that
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an individuals
should pay for it. To illustrate, higher cost would encourage
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people
to
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use
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public
modes
because of this
several obstacles will mitigate.
For example
, traffic congestion and environmental hazards are taking birth due to usage of more cars for short and long distance, which leads to pollution and traffic jams.
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So
, if the populace contribute finance for the betterment of
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roads
then number of problems would
be alleviated
.
Moreover
, it
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would helpful
for the
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government
to invest taxes on education and health are.

In conclusion
, it is
clearly
evident that expanding the
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road
system
is need
of the individuals and more cost should
be met
by the car owners and
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big
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companies
,
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but
an administrator
also
utilize
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some
money for this purpose.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay The number of cars keeps increasing, so road systems should be expended. Some people think the government should pay for it, while others think car owners should pay for it. What’s your opinion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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