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Some people think that the government should spend money on road systems, while others think car owners who use those roads should pay. v.1

Some people think that the government should spend money on road systems, while others think car owners who use those roads should pay. v. 1
Roads are indispensable for an effective transportation system for the public. Though there are other modes of transportation, road system occupies the paramount place due to its convenience and less cost. Some people think that the government should pay for the road system, while others are on the view that drivers or car owners should responsible for it. This essay examines both these aspects. On the one hand, there are some grounds to support the view that drivers should pay on the road system. Firstly, drivers will become more responsible. That is, if they have to pay for road transport, it creates the feeling of ‘ours’ and as a result, they avoid harsh driving and become more concern about roads. Another important benefit is that it may cause a decline in the number of drivers. To make it clearer, when drivers should pay for the road system, people depend on public transport in order to reduce financial loss. Hence the number of private vehicles decreases. On the other hand, it is quite easy to understand the reasons for the government should pay on the road system. Primarily, it is the responsibility of the government should spend money on the road system. Because public pay tax amount and this money should be used for their development itself. Secondly, if the government is responsible, it leads to a wide range of developments and aids in communication and transportation in the public and national prosperity is the end products. Moreover, the government can use modern technology as large-scale projects in order to improve the road system and in turn it helps the public. In addition, people can reduce the burden on them when a government spends on these public activities. To conclude, when we weigh both aspects, it is crystal clear that the government can spend more effectively and efficiently for the road system rather than the drivers. But every person should work hand in hand and along with authority to maintain proper transportation methods.
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, while others are on the view that
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or car owners should responsible for it. This essay examines both these aspects.

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, there are
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will become more responsible.
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pay
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transport, it creates the feeling of ‘ours’ and
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. Another
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benefit is that it may cause a decline in the number of
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. To
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depend on
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transport in order to
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financial loss.
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On the other
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, it is quite easy to understand the reasons for the
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government
should
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pay
on the
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road
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system
.
Primarily
, it is the responsibility of the
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government
should spend money on the
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road
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system
.
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public
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tax amount and this money should be
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used
for their development itself.
Secondly
, if the
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government
is responsible, it leads to a wide range of developments and aids in communication and
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transportation
in the
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public
and national prosperity is the
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end
products.
Moreover
, the
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government
can
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use
modern technology as large-scale projects in order to
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improve
the
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road
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and in turn it
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helps
the
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.
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,
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people
can
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reduce
the burden on them when a
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spends on these
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public
activities.

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clear
that the
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can spend more
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rather
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.
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every person should work
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in
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and along with authority to maintain proper
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transportation
methods.
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53Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that the government should spend money on road systems, while others think car owners who use those roads should pay. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
332 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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