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As the number of cars increases, more money has to be spent on road systems. Some people think the government should pay for this. Others, however, think that the user should cover the costs. Discuss both these views and give your opinion? v.2

As the number of cars increases, more money has to be spent on road systems. Some people think the government should pay for this. Others, however, think that the user should cover the costs. v. 2
Things related to sports are being advertised by a myriad of renowned sports players. This essay will argue that disadvantage of this outweighs the advantages. This essay will first demonstrate that the product advertised by famous players, boost the sales of that product, followed by analysis of the primary disadvantage, is the product does not last longer, it can decline the reputation of that player. To embark on, it is irrefutable that the product advertised by any prominent person is bought by the majority of people. So in order to increase the production of sports products, many companies broadcast renowned players in their advertisements. It cannot be denied that famous players have a huge fan following and many people considered them as their role models because of which, people follow them in every aspect and tries to do and buy the things suggested by them in the advertisements. Thus, it is advantageous in boosting the sale of that product. On the other hand, sometimes these players may also have to face difficulties, such as they can loss their status because the product that player have advertised does not last long and is not good enough as it is shown in the advertisement. So, there will be a chance of obligation to the player that he is misleading the public by advertising the duplicate products. For instance, a famous wrestler, The Great Khali, once advertised the product of body gainer, which was bought by a majority of people and it affected the health of people negatively. However, Great Khali does not loss his status, but he was hated and many people started disliking him. To conclude, the fact that the player can loss his reputation by advertising any products clearly outweigh the flawed argument that it is advantageous for the production and boosting of sales
Things related to sports are being
advertised
by a myriad of renowned sports
players
. This essay will argue that disadvantage of this outweighs the advantages. This essay will
first
demonstrate that the
product
advertised
by
famous
players
, boost the sales of that
product
, followed by analysis of the primary disadvantage, is the
product
does not last longer, it can decline the reputation of that player.

To embark on, it is irrefutable that the
product
advertised
by any prominent person is
bought
by the majority of
people
.
So
in order to increase the production of sports
products
,
many
companies
broadcast renowned
players
in their advertisements. It cannot
be denied
that
famous
players
have a huge fan following and
many
people
considered them as their role models
because
of which,
people
follow them in every aspect and tries to do and
buy
the things suggested by them in the advertisements.
Thus
, it is advantageous in boosting the sale of that product.

On the other hand
,
sometimes
these
players
may
also
have to
face difficulties, such as they can
loss
their status
because
the
product
that
player
have
advertised
does not last long and is not
good
enough
as it
is shown
in the advertisement.
So
, there will be a chance of obligation to the
player
that he is misleading the public by advertising the duplicate
products
.
For instance
, a
famous
wrestler, The Great
Khali
, once
advertised
the
product
of body gainer, which was
bought
by a majority of
people
and it
affected
the health of
people
negatively
.
However
, Great
Khali
does not loss his status,
but
he
was hated
and
many
people
started
disliking him.

To conclude
, the fact that the
player
can
loss
his reputation by advertising any
products
clearly
outweigh the flawed argument that it is advantageous for the production and boosting of sales
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay As the number of cars increases, more money has to be spent on road systems. Some people think the government should pay for this. Others, however, think that the user should cover the costs. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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