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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.8

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. v. 8
People have different views about how much choice students should have with regard to what they can study at university. While some think that students should only be allowed to study subjects that these people think will be valuable in the future like science and technology, I believe that everyone should be able to choose their area of study. This essay will analyse both sides of this argument. For many people, restricting university students to areas that will be useful in the future is an easy statement to make. The main reason is that these kind of subjects contribute visibly to develop society. For example, improvements in medical department rely on advances medical research, engineering, computer technology and science. Only allowing students to have an education on these kind of specialties could lead to new inventions, economic growth and greater future prosperity. In spite of these believes, I think that university students should be free to choose their preferred areas of study. In my opinion, society will have more benefits if our students are passionate about what they are learning. Besides that, nobody can predict the future and what kind of skills will be needed for jobs. For instance, there may be entirely new fields created that need strong, artistic ability. If students are only trained to be good scientists or engineers, they may not be able to succeed in these new domains. Additionally, if we allow students to choose their major, society will be able to adapt to future easily, due to diversity of knowledge and skills. In conclusion, while it may seem sensible for universities to focus only on the most useful subjects, I personally prefer the current system in which everyone has the opportunity to study whatever they like.
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subjects that these
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like science and technology, I believe that everyone should be able to choose their area of
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both sides of this argument.

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, restricting
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students
to areas that will be useful in the
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future
is an easy statement to
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. The main reason is that
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students
to have an education on
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these kind
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future
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students
should be free to choose their preferred areas of
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. In my opinion, society will have more benefits if our
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students
are passionate about what they are learning.
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future
and what kind of
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students
are
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only
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good
scientists or engineers, they may not be able to succeed in these new domains.
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, if we
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allow
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students
to choose their major, society will be able to adapt to
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future
easily
, due to diversity of knowledge and
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skills
.

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on the most useful subjects, I
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system in which everyone has the opportunity to
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IELTS essay Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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