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The news has no connection with most people’s life and it is therefore a waste of time for most of us for reading newspaper and watching television news program. What extend do you agree or disagree? v.1

The news has no connection with most people’s life and it is therefore a waste of time for most of us for reading newspaper and watching television news program. What extend v. 1
Someone argued that it is unnecessary for us to read the news due to it is isolated from our lives. Personally, I strongly disagree with this statement. In this essay, several benefits of learning news will be listed to prove the importance of becoming aware of surroundings. To begin with, it is quite wrong to believe the news is far from our lives. On the contrary, most of the events happen around us. For instance, it is universally known that nowadays Coronavirus is popular in China. Thanks to the rapid spread of the news among all the media platforms, more and more people attach more significance to staying at home in order to prevent the infection. It is obvious that the news becomes an essential avenue to inform the public about events which may affect them, keeping society safe and ordered. In addition, the news is a broad category: we find the news catering to diverse interests, ranging from sports to fashion. It is a kind of source where your viewpoints stem from. Meanwhile, the news greatly shows not only those unknown things occurring on the opposite side of the world which literally opens your horizon, but also those advanced researches which do huge benefits to your lives. There is countless valuable information in the news and it is definitely a pity for you to ignore them. In conclusion, the news provides plenty of useful resources which closely link to everyone over the world. Therefore, in my opinion it is advisable to access to the news regularly, which helps you move outside the narrow zone of your personal affairs.
Someone argued that it is unnecessary for us to read the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
due to it
is isolated
from our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
.
Personally
, I
strongly
disagree with this statement. In this essay, several benefits of learning
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
will
be listed
to prove the importance of becoming aware of surroundings.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, it is quite
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
wrong
to believe the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
is far from our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
.
On the contrary
, most of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
happen around us.
For instance
, it is
universally
known that nowadays Coronavirus is popular in China. Thanks to the rapid spread of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
among all the media platforms, more and more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
attach more significance to staying at home in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
the infection. It is obvious that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
becomes an essential avenue to inform the public about
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
which may affect them, keeping society safe and ordered.

In addition
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
is a broad category: we find the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
catering to diverse interests, ranging from sports to fashion. It is a kind of source where your viewpoints stem from. Meanwhile, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
greatly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
those unknown things occurring on the opposite side of the world which
literally
opens your horizon,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
those advanced researches which do huge benefits to your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
. There is countless valuable information in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
and it is definitely a pity for you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ignore
them.

In conclusion
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
provides
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
plenty
of useful resources which
closely
link to everyone over the world.
Therefore
, in my opinion it is advisable to access to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
regularly
, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
outside the narrow zone of your personal affairs.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The news has no connection with most people’s life and it is therefore a waste of time for most of us for reading newspaper and watching television news program. What extend v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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