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Some people think news has no connection to people's lives, so then it is a waste of time to read the news in the newspaper and watch television news programmes. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people think news has no connection to people's lives, so then it is a waste of time to read the news in the newspaper and watch television news programmes. v. 1
It is wasting time for receiving news whether reading a newspaper or watching TV programmes, so there are those who claim that news unlinks peoples’ lives. From my perspective, I completely disagree with this viewpoint. The supporting reasons will be discussed throughout the essay. There are some justifications about why people's lives have a relationship with the news. The first and possibly the most obvious reason is that people might have the readiness for preparing themselves, they might not awareness and accept those situations. Due to the fact that numerous people have their businesses, they exactly need to cope with problems, particularly fluctuated economy or inflation. This action impacts on the supporting citations. A clear illustration of this is the latest new which is COVID-19, this affects various things, whether tourist attraction or share, resulting in adversely affected investors. Another important point to consider is generally knowledges, citizen possibly feels like the approach the oversea. Some group of viewers lacks opportunity to travelling other countries, so the TV news programmes are the way can illustrate the visualization. Numerous viewers might educate their cultural tradition throughout the screen similar reality. Additionally, most news mostly provides the foreigner news which have subtitles or translate for people who do not capable for foreigner languages. For instance, ASEAN organization or trade war that people are able to keep informed. This action lead, to teach children become being modernized. In conclusion, even though the receiving news has without connection, it brings about various benefits. It is not easy to arrange information, so the reporter is the animal behaviour to explain such as outer or inter news. Personally, I recommend that receiving pieces of information by any way that people can suddenly know it, there is not thought to lose.
It is wasting time for receiving
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news
whether reading a newspaper or watching TV
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programmes
,
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so
there are those who claim that
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news
unlinks
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peoples’
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lives
. From my perspective, I completely disagree with this viewpoint. The supporting reasons will
be discussed
throughout the essay.

There are
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some
justifications about why
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people
's
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lives
have a relationship with the
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news
. The
first
and
possibly
the most obvious reason is that
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people
might have the readiness for preparing themselves, they
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might not awareness
and accept those situations. Due to the fact that numerous
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people
have their businesses, they exactly need to cope with problems,
particularly
fluctuated economy or inflation. This action impacts on the supporting citations. A
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
illustration of this is the latest
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new
which is COVID-19, this affects various things, whether tourist attraction or share, resulting in
adversely
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affected
investors.

Another
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important
point to consider is
generally
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knowledges
, citizen
possibly
feels like the approach the oversea.
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Some
group of viewers lacks opportunity to travelling other countries,
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so
the TV
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news
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programmes
are the way can illustrate the visualization. Numerous viewers might educate their cultural tradition throughout the screen similar reality.
Additionally
, most
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news
mostly
provides the foreigner
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news
which have subtitles or translate for
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people
who do not capable for foreigner languages.
For instance
, ASEAN organization or trade war that
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people
are able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
informed. This action lead, to teach children become
being modernized
.

In conclusion
,
even though
the receiving
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news
has without connection, it brings about various benefits. It is not easy to arrange information,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
the reporter is the animal
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behaviour
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
such as outer or inter
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news
.
Personally
, I recommend that receiving pieces of information by any way that
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people
can
suddenly
know it, there is not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
to lose.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think news has no connection to people's lives, so then it is a waste of time to read the news in the newspaper and watch television news programmes. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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