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Some people think news has no connection to people’s lives. So then it is a waste of time to read the newspaper and watch television news programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people think news has no connection to people’s lives. So then it is a waste of time to read the newspaper and watch television news programs. v. 1
It is claimed that spending time on reading or watching news is absolutely wasteful. Truth be told, I find it hard to agree because having access to daily news is a must to be well informed about what is going on in the world and to be equipped with specialized knowledge for conducting further scientific research. For the general public, it is advisable to be aware of the current state of affairs. This is certainly directly related to individual life. A typical example for this close relationship is what people should do in case of war. More specifically, after reading the news about the outbreak of a war near them, people may immediately prepare food for fear of the possibility of food shortages. Those who work as scientists are always in need of updated information from news reports about various fields. These range from education to economics and health care. For instance, news about the current corona virus has pushed researchers all over the world to compete 24/7 in inventing a vaccine against it. As a result, it can be argued that news is closely related to the outside world whether common people or experts in the scientific world are taken into consideration. Summarizing, when it comes to the belief that reading news in newspapers or watching news on television programs is a total waste of time, I am not convinced at all. This is merely because all people need news no matter what job they are engaged in. Depending on their occupation, people might obtain different useful pieces of information when they are exposed to one and the same news item.
It
is claimed
that spending time on reading or watching
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news
is
absolutely
wasteful. Truth be
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told
, I find it
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hard
to
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agree
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because
having access to daily
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news
is a
After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use "must" or "have to" here.
must to
be
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
well informed
about what is going on in the
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world
and to
be equipped
with specialized knowledge for conducting
further
scientific research.

For the
Consider using "public".
general public
, it is advisable to be aware of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
state of affairs. This is
certainly
directly
related to individual life. A typical example for this close relationship is what
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people
should do in case of war. More
specifically
, after reading the
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news
about the outbreak of a war near them,
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people
may immediately prepare food for fear of the possibility of food shortages.

Those who work as scientists are always in need of updated information from
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news
reports about various fields. These range from education to economics and health care.
For instance
,
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news
about the
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current
The term "coronavirus" (= disease) is spelled as one word.
corona virus
has pushed researchers all over the
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world
to compete 24/7 in inventing a vaccine against it.
As a result
, it can
be argued
that
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news
is
closely
related to the outside
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world
whether common
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people
or experts in the scientific
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world
are taken
into consideration.

Summarizing, when it
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comes
to the belief that reading
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news
in newspapers or watching
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news
on television programs is a total waste of time, I am not convinced at all. This is
merely
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because
all
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people
need
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news
no matter what job they
are engaged
in. Depending on their occupation,
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people
might obtain
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
useful pieces of information when they
are exposed
to one and the same
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
item.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think news has no connection to people’s lives. So then it is a waste of time to read the newspaper and watch television news programs. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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