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The money spent by governments on space programmes would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

The money spent by governments on space programmes would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals. v. 1
Governments in some countries spend large amounts of money on space exploration programmes. I completely agree with the idea that these are a waste of money, and that the funds should be allocated to public services. There are several reasons why space programmes should be abandoned. Firstly, it is extremely expensive to train scientists and other staff involved with space missions, and facilities and equipment also come at a huge cost to the government. Secondly, these programmes do not benefit normal people in our daily lives; they are simply vanity projects for politicians. Finally, many missions to space fail completely, and the smallest technological error can cost astronauts their lives. The Challenger space shuttle disaster showed us that space travel is extremely dangerous, and in my opinion it is not worth the risk. I believe that the money from space programmes should go to vital public services instead. It is much cheaper to train doctors, teachers, police and other public service workers than it is to train astronauts or the scientists and engineers who work on space exploration projects. Furthermore, public servants do jobs that have a positive impact on every member of society. For example, we all use schools, hospitals and roads, and we all need the security that the police provide. If governments reallocated the money spent on space travel and research, many thousands of people could be lifted out of poverty or given a better quality of life. In conclusion, my view is that governments should spend money on services that benefit all members of society, and it is wrong to waste resources on projects that do not improve our everyday lives.
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countries spend large amounts of
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exploration

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. I completely
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that these are a waste of
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money
, and that the funds should
be allocated
to
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public
services.

There are several reasons why
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space
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programmes
should
be abandoned
.
Firstly
, it is

extremely
expensive to train scientists and other staff involved with
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space
missions, and facilities and equipment
also
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come
at a huge cost to the
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government
.
Secondly
, these
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programmes
do not benefit normal
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people
in our daily
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lives
; they are
simply
vanity projects for politicians.
Finally
,
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many
missions to
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space
fail completely, and the smallest technological error can cost astronauts their
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lives
. The Challenger
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space
shuttle disaster
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showed
us that
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travel is
extremely
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dangerous
, and in my opinion it is not worth the
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risk
.

I believe that the
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money
from
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space
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programmes
should go to vital
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public
services
instead
. It is much cheaper to train doctors, teachers, police and other
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public
service workers than it is to train astronauts or the scientists and engineers who work on
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space
exploration projects.
Furthermore
,
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public
servants do jobs that have a
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positive
impact on every member of society.
For example
, we all
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use
schools, hospitals and roads, and we all need the security that the police provide. If
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governments
reallocated the
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money
spent on
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space
travel and research,
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many
thousands of
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people
could
be lifted
out of poverty or
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given
a better quality of life.

In conclusion
, my view is that
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governments
should spend
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money
on services that benefit all members of society, and it is
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wrong
to waste resources on projects that do not
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improve
our everyday
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lives
.
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IELTS essay The money spent by governments on space programmes would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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