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The media plays a valuable role in keeping us informed and entertained However many people believe it has too much power and freedom Discuss your view on this giving examples and presenting a balanced argument both in favor of and against the power and fr v.2

The media plays a valuable role in keeping us informed and entertained However many people believe it has too much power and freedom Discuss your view on this giving examples and presenting a balanced argument both in favor of and against the power and fr v. 2
Media portrays every civilization with its all sectors and lifestyles. Presently, media plays a magnificent role to keep people up to date in every walk of life to be advanced, modern, well informed and amused. However, its believed to have earth-shattering power and freedom to influence attitudes of people in anyway. Here, this essay will account for both sides with my opinion. There are manifold pros of media in modern societies. First and foremost, media serves information of general issues to ensure safety, progress, well planning of proactive steps to accomplish best opportunities of buying, getting jobs and education. For instance, people watch variety of news educational and awareness programs related to crime, health tips, saving money, root causes behind evils of societies. Besides this, broadcasting of adverts for best shopping, information about sports, business and political issues allows people to know about progress of their nations. Therefore, media nourish people with superior knowledge and awareness to uplift standard of living. By contrast, it has thorny side too. To commence with, nowadays, media has empowerment to invade into private life of prominent personalities and represent personal life of someone by adding rumor and spice for boosting business. As a result, regardless about escaping truth, a person' s life is either defamed or exaggerated which is beyond reality. Besides this, media, sometime, incites people to an extent to raise controversial issues by fake justifications, rumor and manipulation. For example, recently, some news channels created rumors about a prestigious boxer Vijender Singh regarding doping before contests. Later, given information to public was far away from truth and no evidence was found to make Vijender feel guilty. Hence, surplus freedom to media not only deface many lives but also mislead people sometime. From my perception, although media contributes phenomenally to suffice needs of people, unnecessary freedom is perilous for well being of mankind. It is mandatory to set a benchmark for media to deliver information in a precise way to avert riots, dissatisfaction and violence. Moreover, media channels should be warned if something illegal is shown publically. To recapitulate, undenaibly, media underlies the scenario of modern communities. However, originality of news and positive influence over people should be motto of media.
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Media
portrays every civilization with its all sectors and lifestyles.
Presently
,
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media
plays a magnificent role to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
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people
up to date in every walk of
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life
to
be advanced
, modern,
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well informed
and amused.
However
, its believed to have earth-shattering power and freedom to influence attitudes of
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people
Did you mean "in any way"?
in anyway
. Here, this essay will account for both sides with my opinion.

There are manifold pros of
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media
in modern societies.
First
and foremost,
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media
serves
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information
of general issues to ensure safety, progress, well planning of proactive steps to
A determiner is probably missing here: "accomplish the best".
accomplish best
opportunities of buying, getting jobs and education.
For instance
,
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
variety of news educational and awareness programs related to crime, health tips, saving money, root causes behind evils of societies.
Besides
this, broadcasting of adverts for best shopping,
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information
about sports, business and political issues
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allows
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people
to know about progress of their nations.
Therefore
,
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media
nourish
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people
with superior knowledge and awareness to uplift standard of living. By contrast, it has thorny side too.

To commence with, nowadays,
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media
has empowerment to invade into private
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life
of prominent personalities and represent personal
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life
of someone by adding rumor and spice for boosting business.
As a result
, regardless about escaping truth, a
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person&
#039; s
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life
is either defamed or exaggerated which is beyond reality.
Besides
this,
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media
, sometime, incites
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people
to an extent to raise controversial issues by fake justifications, rumor and manipulation.
For example
, recently,
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some
news channels created rumors about a prestigious boxer
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Vijender
Singh regarding doping
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before
contests. Later,
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given
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information
to public was far away from truth and no evidence
was found
to
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make
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Vijender
feel guilty.
Hence
, surplus freedom to
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media
not
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only
deface
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many
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lives
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but
also
mislead
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people
sometime.

From my perception, although
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media
contributes
phenomenally
to suffice needs of
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people
, unnecessary freedom is perilous for
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
well being
of mankind. It is mandatory to set a benchmark for
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media
to deliver
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information
Consider replacing "in a precise way" with the adverb for "precise"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a precise way
to avert riots, dissatisfaction and violence.
Moreover
,
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media
channels should
be warned
if something illegal
is shown
publically
.

To recapitulate,
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undenaibly
,
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media
underlies the scenario of modern communities.
However
, originality of news and
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positive
influence over
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people
should be motto of
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media
.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay The media plays a valuable role in keeping us informed and entertained However many people believe it has too much power and freedom Discuss your view on this giving examples and presenting a balanced argument both in favor of and against the power and fr v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
367 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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