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The maps below changes in the Spanish city of Castellon in recent times. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparations where relevant v.1

The maps below changes in the Spanish city of Castellon in recent times.
In recent years, many people spend time with internet, especially teenagers and thus spending less time with real people. Even though, the internet or technology can help about worldwide communicates, but it also has a negative effect which is effective in our daily life activities, First, the benefits of the internet about communication are hard to disagree about it. People can talk and connected in a different part of the world. It's better than past that can use only email or phone which take time and hard to reply in real time. So, the internet has changed in a better way dramatically. It also has a lot of applications for chatting such as Facebook Line MSN or Instagram that created online communities and can share everything in real life. For business, internet is very important since people have to use the internet to contact with suppliers or customer within a second. On the other hand, internet has negative impacts on social interaction. People spend most of time with chatting and watching some news or YouTube. So, they aren’t interacting with neighbours or friends in real life. “Human being is a social animal” Aristotle said, this phrase can prove by now in this situation, COVID-19. Even though, we have internet and can meeting with video calling, but it's still not like real human. Also, those who spend too much time on the internet are caused of many syndromes such ass office syndromes and they will lack of face to face interaction, which is opposite to what is a human being. In conclusion, I strongly agree to concerned about social interaction. Although it is true that the internet has many benefits, but we have to concerned about the amount of time of spending on internet. It's important to manage and balance time between online and real human.
In recent years,
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with internet,
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teenagers
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time
with
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.
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help
about worldwide communicates,
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it
also
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negative
effect which is effective in our daily life activities,

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, the benefits of the internet about communication are
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hard
to disagree about it.
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People
can talk and connected in a
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different
part of the world. It's better than past that can
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use
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only
email or phone which take
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time
and
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hard
to reply in
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real
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time
.
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, the internet has
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changed
in a better way
dramatically
. It
also
has
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a lot of
applications for chatting such as Facebook Line MSN or Instagram that created online communities and can share everything in
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real
life. For business, internet is
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very
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important
since
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people
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have to
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use
the internet to contact with suppliers or customer within a second.

On the other hand
, internet has
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negative
impacts on social interaction.
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People
spend most of
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time
with chatting and watching
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some
news or YouTube.
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So
, they aren’t interacting with
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neighbours
or friends in
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real
life.
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“Human
being is a social animal” Aristotle said, this phrase can prove by
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now
in this situation, COVID-19.
Even though
, we have internet and can meeting with video calling,
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but
it's
still
not like
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real
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human
.
Also
, those who spend too much
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time
on the internet
are caused
of
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many
syndromes such ass office
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syndromes and
they will lack of face to face interaction, which is opposite to what is a
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human
being.

In conclusion
, I
strongly
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agree
to concerned about social interaction. Although it is true that the internet has
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many
benefits,
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but
we
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have to
concerned about the amount of
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time
of spending on internet. It's
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important
to manage and balance
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time
between online and
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real
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
human
.
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23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay The maps below changes in the Spanish city of Castellon in recent times.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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