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The man is working night shifts and is too tired to do homework and attend the school. The two people talk about the man's problem. Describe the problem and state which of the two solutions you prefer and why. v.1

The man is working night shifts and is too tired to do homework and attend the school. The two people talk about the man's problem. Describe the problem and state which of the two solutions you prefer and why. v. 1
Education is the way to success. The more you gain it, the more you acquire knowledge and move forward to the successful career. After schooling, going to work is not a bad idea because one start earning and learning at an early age. But in my point of view, a person having a huge amount of information can be more successful in life. After completion of school literacy, when a student goes to college or university for higher study, he learns to deal with several kinds of challenges that we face in our life. The amount of confidence and knowledge that he imbibes from these institutions will definitely going to help him reach his goals in life. Apart from this, he uses to interact with people of high skills and thus, can improve his communication skills too. Moreover, after the schooling a student chooses his one stream of education that he goes to study further, he becomes a professional degree holder in that subject which helps him to get a satisfactory and his stream related work in the future. Furthermore, he also get opportunities to participate in different kind of activities like cultural, sports etc. On the contrary side, if we talk about the students who start working after school, are the ones who become self dependent and more responsible human as compared to the others. There is one thing, that is why I would prefer studying at academy or college, is the Growth. Somebody who have passed only secondary examination, in what stream he can be adapted? This question makes us think of higher studies. Individual having school level study would remain there, even after 10 years. On the other hand, if a person gets a professional degree of 3 or 5 years after schooling, can definitely get 10 times more salary than the person who has been working after schooling for 10 years. In the recent study, in the US, it has proven that persons with higher literacy are much more successful in their lives than the others who didn't study at college or academy. At the end of the day, we can conclude that learning makes a difference. You cannot compare the professional degrees and educational institution or college experiences with schools. So, every individual in our society must be educated enough to reach his aim and be able to welcome a successful and self dependent career. Only then, one can contribute to the well being of the economy of his country.
Education is the way to success. The more you gain it, the more you acquire knowledge and
move
forward to the
successful
career. After
schooling
, going to work is not a
bad
idea
because
one
start
earning and learning at an early age.
But
in my point of view, a
person
having a huge amount of information can be more
successful
in life.

After completion of
school
literacy, when a student goes to college or university for higher
study
, he learns to deal with several kinds of challenges that we face in our life. The amount of confidence and knowledge that he imbibes from these institutions will definitely going to
help
him reach his goals in life. Apart from this, he
uses
to interact with
people
of high
skills
and
thus
, can
improve
his communication
skills
too.
Moreover
, after the
schooling
a student chooses his one stream of education that he goes to
study
further
, he becomes a professional degree holder in that subject which
helps
him to
get
a satisfactory and his stream related work in the future.
Furthermore
, he
also
get
opportunities to participate in
different
kind of activities like cultural, sports etc.

On the contrary
side, if we talk about the students
who
start
working after
school
, are the ones
who
become self dependent and more responsible human as compared to the others. There is one thing,
that is
why I would prefer studying at academy or college, is the Growth. Somebody
who
have passed
only
secondary examination, in what stream he can
be adapted
? This question
makes
us
think
of higher
studies
. Individual having
school
level
study
would remain there, even after 10 years.
On the other hand
, if a
person
gets
a professional degree of 3 or 5 years after
schooling
, can definitely
get
10 times more salary than the
person
who
has been working after
schooling
for 10 years. In the recent
study
, in the US, it has proven that
persons
with higher literacy are much more
successful
in their
lives
than the others
who
didn't
study
at college or academy.

At the
end
of the day, we can conclude that learning
makes
a difference. You cannot compare the professional degrees and educational institution or college experiences with
schools
.
So
, every individual in our society
must
be educated
enough
to reach his aim and be able to welcome a
successful
and self dependent career.
Only
then, one can contribute to the
well being
of the economy of his country.
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IELTS essay The man is working night shifts and is too tired to do homework and attend the school. The two people talk about the man's problem. Describe the problem and state which of the two solutions you prefer and why. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
415 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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