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In many countries, people like to eat a variety of imported food rather than the local food. Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages? v.1

In many countries, people like to eat a variety of imported food rather than the local food. Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1
In many countries, residents prefer purchasing their own home. However, in others they choose to rent their accommodation to minimise the unwanted burdens such as property taxes and a mortgage interest rate. Renting a place would certainly aids people with the flexibility of moving out anytime along with eliminating the cost of maintenance of the property, but there will also be some drawbacks. To begin with, those who opine that renting an accommodation is advantageous can easily point out its flexibility and affordability. That is to say, it gives a freedom to an individual to move in any part of the world according to their job requirements which otherwise, is bit difficult if the person owns a place. Additionally, owning a property always comes with a variety of unwanted expenses including property tax, mortgage interest rates and the maintenance cost, which sometimes makes the survival difficult if people lose their job or went into the financial crises. For instance, according to the New York Times an average householder in the United states pays 10, 000$ as a property tax and 10-12% interest on mortgage yearly and a lot of them have to sell their houses in order to meet with the crises of the Corona Virus. On the other hand, there are various drawbacks of renting the house. Firstly, there is no security as the landlord can ask you to leave anytime, regardless of paying a huge amount of rent every month along with paying the fixed deposit of security at the beginning. Secondly, one has to follow the strict rules and regulations according to the owner’s agreement. In other words, people have to seek permission from the landlord, before organising any event at the home including birthday party or weekend gatherings. Lastly, the huge amount of money, wasted on paying rent, could be utilised in buying own property, so that people do not have to worry about the retirement. In conclusion, although renting a house seems beneficial due to the low rent costs and the freedom to shift the place anytime. However, there are some drawbacks such as security concerns and strict regulations that need to be considered before choosing the type of accommodation.
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countries, residents prefer purchasing their
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own
home.
However
, in others they choose to
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rent
their accommodation to
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minimise
the unwanted burdens such as
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property
taxes and a mortgage interest rate.
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Renting
a place would
certainly
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aids
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people
with the flexibility of moving out anytime along with eliminating the cost of maintenance of the
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property
,
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but
there will
also
be
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some
drawbacks.

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begin
with, those who opine that
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renting
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an accommodation
is advantageous can
easily
point out its flexibility and affordability.
That is
to say, it gives
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a freedom
to an individual to
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move
in any part of the world according to their job requirements which
otherwise
, is
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bit
difficult if the person
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owns
a place.
Additionally
, owning a
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property
always
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comes
with a variety of unwanted expenses including
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property
tax, mortgage interest rates and the maintenance cost, which
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sometimes
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makes
the survival difficult if
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people
lose their job or went into the financial crises.
For instance
, according to the New York Times an average householder in the
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United states
pays 10,
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000$
as a
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property
tax and 10-12% interest on mortgage yearly and
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a lot of
them
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have to
sell their
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houses
in order to
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meet
with the crises of the
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Corona Virus
.

On the other hand
, there are various drawbacks of
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renting
the
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house
.
Firstly
, there is no security as the landlord can ask you to
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leave
anytime, regardless of paying a huge amount of
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rent
every month along with paying the
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fixed
deposit of security at the beginning.
Secondly
, one
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has to
follow the strict
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rules
and regulations according to the owner’s agreement.
In other words
,
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people
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have to
seek permission from the landlord,
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before
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organising
any
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event
at the home including birthday party or weekend gatherings.
Lastly
, the huge amount of money, wasted on paying
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rent
, could be
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utilised
in buying
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own
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property
,
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so
that
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people
do not
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have to
worry about the retirement.

In conclusion
, although
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renting
a
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house
seems beneficial due to the low
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rent
costs and the freedom to shift the place anytime.
However
, there are
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some
drawbacks such as security concerns and strict regulations that need to
be considered
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
choosing the type of accommodation.
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IELTS essay In many countries, people like to eat a variety of imported food rather than the local food. Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
365 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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