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PTE essay It is argued that getting married before finishing school or getting a job is not a good choice To what extent do you agree or disagree v.1

PTE essay It is argued that getting married before finishing school or getting a job is not a good choice v. 1
It is believed that relocating the large companies such as the factories and worker to the outskirt of big cities can solve a significant amount of problems. In my point of view, I totally agree with this issue to improve the life qualities of the resident. On the one hand, there are a substantial number of benefits of moving the factories and firms to the rural areas. To begin with, the volume of traffic and housing would be lower, not only helping residents reduce the traffic congestion, but it also prevents from climate change. Nowadays, a lot of vehicles are travelled to work by the citizen and this will lead to crowded roads during the rush hours. Moreover, the proportions of carbon dioxide, which is emitted by factories and vehicles, will be decreased if those companies moved to the outskirt areas. For example, some manufactures in Da Nang have been relocated to the rural areas, so the life quality of the residents here is very healthy and better. On the other hand, some other solutions can also solve this issue. Initially, the road systems in big cities need to develop due to the narrow road system is the reason for the traffic jam in many countries all over the world. For instance, the government in Vietnam has built wider roads and motorway which can allow a large number of means of transportation and Vinh city was successful in this solution. Besides, the residential areas will be expanded to make the citizens’ life convenient due to the residents will be reduced the pressure in housing problems. To sum up, relocating the companies and factories to the suburb area is a good idea, but other solutions which I had mentioned can also be done by the government.
It
is believed
that relocating the large
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companies
such as the
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factories
and worker to the outskirt of
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big
cities can solve a significant amount of problems. In my point of view, I
totally
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agree
with this issue to
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improve
the life qualities of the resident.

On the one hand, there are a substantial number of benefits of moving the
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factories
and firms to the rural
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areas
. To
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begin
with, the volume of traffic and housing would be lower, not
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only
helping residents
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reduce
the traffic congestion,
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but
it
also
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prevents
from climate
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change
. Nowadays,
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a lot of
vehicles
are travelled
to work by the citizen and this will lead to crowded
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roads
during the rush hours.
Moreover
, the proportions of carbon dioxide, which
is emitted
by
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factories
and vehicles, will
be decreased
if those
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companies
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moved
to the outskirt
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areas
.
For example
,
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some
manufactures in
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Da
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Nang
have
been relocated
to the rural
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areas
,
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so
the life quality of the residents here is
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very
healthy and better.

On the other hand
,
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some
other solutions can
also
solve this issue.
Initially
, the
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road
systems in
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big
cities need to develop due to the narrow
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road
system is the reason for the traffic jam in
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many
countries all over the world.
For instance
, the
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government
in Vietnam has built wider
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roads
and motorway which can
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allow
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a large number of
means of transportation and
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Vinh
city was successful in this solution.
Besides
, the residential
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areas
will
be expanded
to
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make
the citizens’ life convenient due to the residents will be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
the pressure in housing problems.

To sum up, relocating the
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companies
and
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factories
to the suburb
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area
is a
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good
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idea
,
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but
other solutions which I had mentioned can
also
be done
by the
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government
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay PTE essay It is argued that getting married before finishing school or getting a job is not a good choice v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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