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Q5. 16 The man doesn't have time to study for his exams because he is tutoring a high school student. The two people talk about the man's problem. Describe the problem and state which of the two solutions you prefer and why. v.1

Q5. 16 The man doesn't have time to study for his exams because he is tutoring a high school student. The two people talk about the man's problem. Describe the problem and state which of the two solutions you prefer and why. v. 1
In the fast-paced world of today, it seems that the tradition of families having meals together is gradually being forgotten. From my perspective, there could be several reasons behind the disappearance of this joyful activity. I also firmly believe that the demise of such an iconic tradition can have some serious implications on both adults and children. There are several causes behind the decline of the tradition of families eating together. This separation may be due to the busy working schedule of the family members. Nowadays, it is obvious that parents are working harder for a longer period of time so as to support their families. Some adults, facing financial difficulties, even have to take more shifts than they were initially allotted. Likewise, children now also have a more demanding workload from school, which sometimes requires them to spend more time doing homework. As a result, their time for family meals is significantly reduced. Additionally, disputes within the family may prevent the parents and their kids from sitting down and enjoying a delightful meal together. This can be considered a very common reason for that phenomenon. Furthermore, it is inevitable that the disappearance of family meals can have several detrimental effects on the family. When people in a family cannot spend time eating together, the family bonds are likely to be loosened, which can result in children feeling a lack of affection from their own parents. Furthermore, it is at family meals that parents shape their children's manners as well as teach them how to behave when there are guests. Therefore, kids who do not have meals with their parents frequently enough are less likely to develop proper manners. In conclusion, there are many reasons which may prevent modern families from eating together, including a busy schedule or family disputes and it is clear that such lack of quality time with family can have negative impacts on families and on children's development.
In the
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fast
-paced world of
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today
, it seems that the tradition of
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families
having
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meals
together is
gradually
being forgotten
. From my perspective, there could be several reasons behind the disappearance of this joyful activity. I
also
firmly
believe that the demise of such an iconic tradition can have
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some
serious implications on both adults and children.

There are several causes behind the decline of the tradition of
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families
eating together. This separation may be due to the busy working schedule of the
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family
members. Nowadays, it is obvious that
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parents
are working harder for a longer period of
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time
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so as to
support their
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families
.
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Some
adults, facing financial difficulties, even
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have to
take more shifts than they were
initially
allotted.
Likewise
, children
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now
also
have a more demanding workload from school, which
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sometimes
requires them to spend more
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time
doing homework.
As a result
, their
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time
for
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family
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meals
is
significantly
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reduced
.
Additionally
, disputes within the
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family
may
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prevent
the
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parents
and their kids from sitting down and enjoying a delightful
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meal
together. This can
be considered
a
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very
common reason for that phenomenon.

Furthermore
, it is inevitable that the disappearance of
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family
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meals
can have several detrimental effects on the
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family
. When
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people
in a
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family
cannot spend
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time
eating together, the
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family
bonds are likely to
be loosened
, which can result in children feeling a lack of affection from their
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own
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parents
.
Furthermore
, it is at
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family
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meals
that
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parents
shape their children's manners
as well
as teach them how to behave when there are guests.
Therefore
, kids who do not have
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meals
with their
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parents
frequently
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enough
are less likely to develop proper manners.

In conclusion
, there are
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many
reasons which may
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prevent
modern
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families
from eating together, including a busy schedule or
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family
disputes and it is
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clear
that such lack of quality
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time
with
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family
can have
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negative
impacts on
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families
and on children's development.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Q5. 16 The man doesn't have time to study for his exams because he is tutoring a high school student. The two people talk about the man's problem. Describe the problem and state which of the two solutions you prefer and why. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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