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The man is expressing his opinion about the new bus terminal. State his opinion and explain the reasons he gives for holding his opinion. v.1

The man is expressing his opinion about the new bus terminal. State his opinion and explain the reasons he gives for holding his opinion. v. 1
Nowadays, The people are showing so much enthusiasm to know other state science, fashion and willing to come. Local people think people who are coming from other countries they must and should follow their beliefs and customs. Some people argue that coming guest they will certainly change the culture which was followed by hundreds of years. We will discuss the both sides which will be elucidated in the essay. Firstly, They are so many people who are likely to visit other countries due to the work and some persons are coming like a tourist. For instance, In the recent time Trump came to India, Prime minister encouraged him with his culture and traditions. He is the president of the USA. Their culture is too different, By visiting our india he just saw the behaviour, skill and heritage of the people However he cannot influence his fashion in the states. On the other hand, Different country people are very interested in India holy places. They will come and visit the different temples and pray for the god. To exemplify, They may notice different attire people used to wear when coming to visit temple However some people are likely to follow that tradition for that particular day not all the times when they go back to their place. This means it's just attracting our art to them, some people might follow them but not all the people. To sum up, Different countries have different cultures, When they are coming to other states they follow their perception and behaviour, but definitely, I personally feel they do not make any ability difference and spoil them. They will give respect to the other cultures and their traditions, values. Sometimes they would likely to follow. Depend on individual perception.
Nowadays, The
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much enthusiasm to know
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their beliefs and customs.
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Some
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people
argue that
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which
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by hundreds of years. We will discuss the both sides which will
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in the essay.

Firstly
, They are
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countries
due to the work and
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some
persons are
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coming
like a tourist.
For instance
, In the recent time Trump came to India, Prime minister encouraged him with his
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culture
and traditions. He is the president of the USA. Their
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culture
is too
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different
, By visiting our
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the
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behaviour
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skill
and heritage of the
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people
However
he cannot influence his fashion in the states.

On the
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hand,
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country
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are
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interested in India holy places. They will
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come
and visit the
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temples and pray for the god. To exemplify, They may notice
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different
attire
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people
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used
to wear when
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coming
to visit temple
However
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some
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people
are likely to
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that tradition for that particular day not all the times when they go back to their place. This means it's
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just
attracting our art to them,
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not all the
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.

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have
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cultures
, When they are
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other
states they
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their perception and
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behaviour
,
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definitely, I
personally
feel they do not
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make
any ability difference and spoil them. They will give respect to the
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other
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cultures
and their traditions, values.
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Sometimes
they would likely to
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follow
. Depend on individual perception.
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IELTS essay The man is expressing his opinion about the new bus terminal. State his opinion and explain the reasons he gives for holding his opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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