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The line graph below shows the changes in the price of Outokumpu companies in euros between January 2006 and December 2010 v.1

The line graph below shows the changes in the price of Outokumpu companies in euros between January 2006 and December 2010 v. 1
It is undeniable that genetic engineering is shaping our lives now, with broad implications for all humans. While I accept that it may have some consequences that harm people, I believe that its benefits outweigh its drawback. The main negative implications of genetic engineering are in two areas; food production and the cloning of humans. Some argue that the more genetically modified crop is produced, the more pestilential organisms, such as insects, pests, will be resisted, and in the long term it will have a negative impact on agriculture and farming. On the other part, the area that worries people more is the cloning of humans. Some believe that cloned people will be used to fight in wars, and it is believed that it may lead unprecedented negative consequences. However, as I mentioned above, genetic engineering has important positive aspects, which outweigh its drawbacks. Firstly, although there may be some negative or unprecedented consequences arising from using genetic engineering, people are likely to come up with ideas that help us deal with those. Secondly, for food production, thanks to the genetic engineering, producers such as farmers will have a chance to produce more with the same amount of supplies since products will be more resistant to harmful organisms and they will be able to grow up without damage, and this will lead to lower prices. The less prices will be, the more people will be able to afford to buy these goods. This can solve global famine problem. Thirdly, for area of biology, scientist may use genetic engineering to come with new vaccines to cure harmful, serious diseases, and they may be able to solve genetic defects even before a child is born with the help of genetic engineering. Moreover, it is highly likely that genetic engineering will improve one's life quality and duration thanks to that genetic engineering will make possible the cloning of organs in labs for transplantation purposes. In summary, I am convinced that genetic engineering will have many positive impacts on our lives, and some drawbacks will be overcome.
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is shaping our
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, with broad implications for all humans. While I accept that it may have
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consequences that harm
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people
, I believe that its benefits outweigh its drawback.

The main
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negative
implications of
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engineering
are in two areas; food production and the cloning of humans.
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Some
argue that the more
genetically
modified crop
is produced
, the more pestilential organisms, such as insects, pests, will
be resisted
, and in the long term it will have a
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negative
impact on agriculture and farming. On the other part, the area that worries
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people
more is the cloning of humans.
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believe that cloned
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people
will be
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used
to fight in wars, and it
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negative
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has
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important
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aspects, which outweigh its drawbacks.
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,
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us deal with those.
Secondly
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, producers such as farmers will have a chance to produce more with the same amount of supplies since products will be more resistant to harmful
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organisms and
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less
prices will be, the more
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will be able to afford to
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. This can solve global famine problem.
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use
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to
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with new vaccines to cure harmful, serious diseases, and they may be able to solve
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defects even
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before
a child
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
Language is not a genetic gift, it is a social gift. Learning a new language is becoming a member of the club – the community of speakers of that language.
Frank Smith

IELTS essay The line graph below shows the changes in the price of Outokumpu companies in euros between January 2006 and December 2010 v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
343 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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