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The line graph below shows the average daily maximum temperature for Auckland and Christchurch, two sites in New Zealand, and London and Edinburgh, two sites in the United Kingdom. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and v.1

The line graph below shows the average daily maximum temperature for Auckland and Christchurch, two sites in New Zealand, and London and Edinburgh, two sites in the United Kingdom.
Arguments have arisen as to why people learn new languages. While it is believed by some that the sole purpose of learning it is for travelling or working, others think that there are other reasons why one would learn new languages. In my opinion, I agree with the latter assertions with a number of reasons. On the one hand, in order to communicate effectively in a new place, it is essential to learn their language. The world today is evolving; businesses are moving from local borders into new international grounds. If a worker intends to move with this trend and grow in his career, then it is a must to learn a new dialect. This not only fosters unity but also helps to make the work seamless without limitations or errors. A recent publication by Harvard Dailies reported that thirty percent of the people that registered for a new language class registered for the sole purpose of their career. This further buttress the fact that workers are taking up new dialect in order to blend well in a different country. On the other hand, I believe that marriage is indeed another reason why people learn new dialects. This is because the world today being a global village, inter-racial marriages keep taking place and it is not going to stop soon. So, in order to communicate effectively with a partner from a different background learning a new language is important. Not only does this prevent conflicts, but it also helps to promote diversity. To illustrate, a recent need to learn the Yoruba language has risen among the Hausa tribes in Nigeria as a result of interracial marriage. In conclusion, while it is paramount that one learns a new language where he intends to live or work, I believe that in order to prevent a misunderstanding among couples, it is necessary to learn a new language.
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to promote diversity. To illustrate, a recent need to
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the Yoruba
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has risen among the Hausa tribes in Nigeria
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of interracial marriage.

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IELTS essay The line graph below shows the average daily maximum temperature for Auckland and Christchurch, two sites in New Zealand, and London and Edinburgh, two sites in the United Kingdom.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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