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The last two decades have seen enormous changes in the way people’s lives are affected by IT, with manyadvances in this field. However, while these technological advances have brought many benefits to the world, it can be argued that these developments i v.2

The last two decades have seen enormous changes in the way people’s lives are affected by IT, with manyadvances in this field. However, while these technological advances have brought many benefits to the world, it can be argued that these developments i v. 2
The last two decades have seen enormous changes in the way people’s lives are affected by IT, with many advances in this field. However, while these technological advances have brought many benefits to the world, it can be argued that these developments in IT will result in more negative impacts than positive. To begin, email has made communication, especially abroad, much simpler and faster, resulting in numerous benefits for commerce and business. Furthermore, the World Wide Web means that information on every conceivable subject is now available to us. For example, people can access news, medical advice, online education courses and much more via the internet. It is evident that these improvements have made life far easier and more convenient for large numbers of people and will continue to do so for decades to come. Nevertheless, the effects of this new technology have not all been beneficial. For example, many people feel that the widespread use of email is destroying traditional forms of communication such as letter writing, telephone and face-to-face conversation. This could result in a decline in people’s basic ability to socialize and interact with each other on a day-to-day basis. In addition, the large size of the Web has meant that it is nearly impossible to regulate and control. This has led to many concerns regarding children accessing unsuitable websites and viruses. Unfortunately, this kind of problem might even get worse in the future at least until more regulated systems are set up.
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online


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education
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easier
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that the widespread
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of email is destroying traditional forms of communication such as letter writing,

telephone and face-to-face conversation. This could result in a decline in
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people’s
basic ability to socialize
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and


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interact
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to
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concerns regarding children accessing unsuitable websites and viruses. Unfortunately, this kind of

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IELTS essay The last two decades have seen enormous changes in the way people’s lives are affected by IT, with manyadvances in this field. However, while these technological advances have brought many benefits to the world, it can be argued that these developments i v. 2

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246 words
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