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The last two decades have seen enormous changes in the way people’s lives are affected by IT, with manyadvances in this field. However, while these technological advances have brought many benefits to the world, it can be argued that these developments i v.1

The last two decades have seen enormous changes in the way people’s lives are affected by IT, with manyadvances in this field. However, while these technological advances have brought many benefits to the world, it can be argued that these developments i v. 1
In recent years, environmental care has become the centre of global debates. Some people claim that government alone is responsible for protecting the environment. On the other hand, environmentalists argue that every individual being must play their own part in looking after the landscape. In this essay, we discuss both viewpoints about this momentous issue. The first group are those who believe that environmental protection is just and only government’s responsibility. Those who are in favour of this statement, often consider the ecosystem as a political issue. They may argue that the men in power are the ones who take the most advantage of the nature’s gifts and consequently the reason why the natural environment is damaged. Therefore, they must take care of cleaning it up. The second group mostly consists of nature lovers and environmentalists. They strictly believe that conserving the environment is a matter of personal issue and everyone must carry their own responsibility. They proclaim that environmental damage is not only about natural resources exploitation and air pollution caused by industrial factories, but also about trashes and garbage left behind from human camps. As the saying goes, “environment is not what we inherit, but what is remained from us”. In conclusion, I personally tend to agree with second group concerns. I truly believe that Mother Nature has given us so many wonderful things. Now, it is our turn to take care of her. But as a matter of fact the environmental protection is a combination task. Meaning that the government must not elude this duty. Government and individuals must cooperate with each other in preserving the nature and wildlife.
In recent years,
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environmental
care has become the
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centre
of global debates.
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Some
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people
claim that
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government
alone is responsible for protecting the
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environment
.
On the other hand
, environmentalists argue that every individual being
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must
play their
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own
part in looking after the landscape. In this essay, we discuss both viewpoints about this momentous issue.

The
first
group are those who believe that
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environmental
protection is
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just
and
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only
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government’s
responsibility. Those who are in
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favour
of this statement,
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often
consider the ecosystem as a political issue. They may argue that the
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men
in power are the ones who take the most advantage of the
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nature’s
gifts and
consequently
the reason why the natural
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environment
is damaged
.
Therefore
, they
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must
take care of cleaning it up.

The second group
mostly
consists of
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nature
lovers and environmentalists. They
strictly
believe that conserving the
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environment
is a matter of personal issue and everyone
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must
carry their
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own
responsibility. They proclaim that
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environmental
damage is not
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only
about natural resources exploitation and air pollution caused by industrial factories,
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but
also
about trashes and garbage
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left
behind from human camps. As the saying goes,
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“environment
is not what we inherit,
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but
what
is remained
from us”.

In conclusion
, I
personally
tend to
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agree
with second group concerns. I
truly
believe that Mother
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Nature
has
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given
us
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so
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many
wonderful things.
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Now
, it is our turn to take care of her.
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But
as a matter of fact the
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environmental
protection is a combination task. Meaning that the
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government
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must
not elude this duty.
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Government
and individuals
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must
cooperate with each other in preserving the
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nature
and wildlife.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay The last two decades have seen enormous changes in the way people’s lives are affected by IT, with manyadvances in this field. However, while these technological advances have brought many benefits to the world, it can be argued that these developments i v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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