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Nowadays consumer goods have become the most important part of people’s lives. Do advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v.14

Nowadays consumer goods have become the most important part of people’s lives. Do advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v. 14
From the beginning of the modern age, people started to rely more on the consumer goods. With the passage of time, this need grows rapidly. As a result, it became the most important part of people’s lives. Generally speaking, using manufacturers' goods is less time consuming. But there are many side effects which need to be considered, first. Consumer goods are the main part of people’s lives and cannot be omitted. But in order to decide whether to bring any specific product into our life, one should weigh the disadvantages over the advantages. Like any other issue, using consumer goods have its pros and cons. The best advantage is that, they are ready to use and almost available everywhere. So the purchaser must spend little precious time providing them. In my opinion, there are more merits to consumer durable goods in comparison to non-durable ones. Durable final products such as cars, home furniture and clothing can last a lifetime and will ease the people’s lives. They have low to zero harm on humans’ personal well-being. On the contrary, nondurable goods which mainly consist of foods can have a lot of side effects on people’s health. For instance, these foods are tending to be more inorganic and they mostly contain additives to widen their life span. Therefore, they can put people’s health in danger. As it is always said, “Nothing is more valuable than people’s health. ” To sum up the points, it can be mentioned that, manufacturers’ goods are essential in people’s lives. But one must not completely depend on them. Generally speaking, people must buy products which their merits outweigh the demerits and will cause no harm to their lives. This is a personal decision which one has to do sensibly according to their lifestyle.
From the beginning of the modern age,
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people
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started
to rely more on the consumer
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goods
. With the passage of time, this need grows
rapidly
.
As a result
, it became the most
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important
part of
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people’s
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lives
.
Generally
speaking, using manufacturers'
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goods
is less
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time consuming
.
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But
there are
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many
side effects which need to
be considered
,
first
.

Consumer
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goods
are the main part of
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people’s
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lives
and cannot
be omitted
.
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But
in order to decide whether to bring any specific product into our life, one should weigh the disadvantages over the advantages.

Like any other issue, using consumer
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goods
have its pros and cons. The best advantage is that, they are ready to
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use
and almost available everywhere.
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So
the purchaser
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must
spend
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little
precious time providing them. In my opinion, there are more merits to consumer durable
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goods
in comparison
to non-durable ones. Durable final products such as cars, home furniture and clothing can last a lifetime and will
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ease
the
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people’s
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lives
. They have low to zero harm on humans’ personal well-being.
On the contrary
,
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nondurable
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goods
which
mainly
consist of foods can have
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a lot of
side effects on
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people’s
health.
For instance
, these foods are tending to be more
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inorganic and
they
mostly
contain additives to widen their life span.
Therefore
, they can put
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people’s
health in
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danger
. As it is always said, “Nothing is more valuable than
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people’s
health. ”

To sum up the points, it can
be mentioned
that, manufacturers’
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goods
are essential in
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people’s
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lives
.
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But
one
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must
not completely depend on them.
Generally
speaking,
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people
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must
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buy
products which their merits outweigh the demerits and will cause no harm to their
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lives
. This is a personal decision which one
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has to
do
sensibly
according to their lifestyle.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays consumer goods have become the most important part of people’s lives. Do advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v. 14

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
296 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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