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Some people say education is the only critical factor to the development of a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

Some people say education is the only critical factor to the development of a country. with this statement? v. 1
One the one hand good education is a highly recommended skill in the developed countries, on the other hand the highest wish of many people in regions of poverty. But what makes education to the key factor for the development of a country? We must acknowledge that education is something that we all need. The differences are just what we learn. Mostly the limited educational horizons of poor and less educated people have more to deal with their personal situation than with problems of the bigger effects on a country. Attending school is sometimes too expensive and it does not feed a family. Nevertheless there must be a reason for education. To me it looks like some countries have realized that Education is the key to the globalization process. If we take India, for example, we can see that a change in the educational system had changed the economy of the country.  The country has changed from a poor region to a high potential aria for IT knowledge. In regard to this fact, it is a must that the Governments of less developed countries take the power of education seriously and offer it to a wide range of people. Spending money for education is the key to a new future effect on the economy and social life. All in all I agree with the importance of education for the development of a country. Less knowledge leads to poverty and not to knowledge that has wide effects. Learning and Knowledge is Power and an investment in the near future and therefore it has to be an official task.
One
the one hand
good
education
is a
highly
recommended
skill
in the developed
countries
,
on the other hand
 the highest wish of
many
people
in regions of poverty.
But
what
makes
education to the key factor for the development of a country?

We
must
acknowledge that
education
is something that we all need. The differences are
just
what we learn.
Mostly
the limited educational horizons of poor and less educated
people
have more to deal with their personal situation than with problems of the bigger effects on a
country
. Attending school is
sometimes
too expensive and it does not feed a family.

Nevertheless
there
must
be a reason for
education
. To me it looks like
some
countries
have realized that
Education
is the key to the globalization process. If we take India,
for example
, we can
see
that a
change
in the educational system had
changed
the economy of the
country
.  The country has
changed
from a poor region to a high potential aria for IT knowledge.

In regard to this fact, it is a
must
that the
Governments
of less developed
countries
take the power of
education
seriously
and offer it to a wide range of
people
. Spending money for
education
is the key to a new future effect on the economy and social life.

All in all I
agree
with the importance of
education
for the development of a
country
. Less knowledge leads to poverty and not to knowledge that has wide effects. Learning and Knowledge is Power and an investment in the near future and
therefore
it
has to
be an official task.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say education is the only critical factor to the development of a country. with this statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
257 words
6
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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