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The internet is a great source of information and has opened up opportunities for people to learn all over the world. Is all information reliable on the internet? What could be done to control information online? v.2

The internet is a great source of information and has opened up opportunities for people to learn all over the world. Is all information reliable on the internet? What could be done to control information online? v. 2
Since the internet has been introduced, our life has changed sharply. A large amount of data for which human beings had been searching for the centuries became available. Firstly, this essay will consider whether all information in the network is secure or not, and secondly, it will discuss what actions should be done to monitor the clue online. Nowadays, there are many reasons to consider the data provided by the internet as precarious. Firstly, the sources in social media are mainly available so that basically everybody is allowed to see and read whatever they want. Consequently, there are a lot of people who are gullible enough and confide such sources. For example, some older people are used to trusting such information, because it seems to them engaging and worth paying attention to. Secondly, many people publish anything in social media accounts without doing any research or understanding the criticality of the situation, and as a result, it causes mass disinformation. There are currently many measurements that could be taken to control the reliability of the material over the internet. The Ministry of Technologies and Information can play a crucial role in the security of information by putting particular restrictions. For instance, they can sieve all information before it is posted. Strict penalties also should be imposed on the individuals and editorial offices posting wrong and incorrect info. Furthermore, some social networks provide humans with the ability of blocking inappropriate material. For example, if somebody posts deceitful information, users are entitled to complain about it to support service and ban the page. To sum up, the Internet has changed the lives of individuals and it remains the main source of information, among which we can find a lot of false data. In my view, human beings eventually have to decide whether to trust it or not.
Since the internet has
been introduced
, our life has
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changed
sharply
. A large amount of data for which human beings had been searching for the centuries became available.
Firstly
, this essay will consider whether all
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information
in the network is secure or not, and
secondly
, it will discuss what actions should
be done
to monitor the clue online.

Nowadays, there are
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many
reasons to consider the data provided by the internet as precarious.
Firstly
, the sources in social media are
mainly
available
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so
that
basically
everybody is
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allowed
to
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see
and read whatever they want.
Consequently
, there are
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a lot of
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people
who are gullible
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enough
and confide such sources.
For example
,
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some
older
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people
are
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used
to trusting such
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information
,
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because
it seems to them engaging and worth paying attention to.
Secondly
,
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many
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people
publish anything in social media accounts without doing any research or understanding the criticality of the situation, and
as a result
, it causes mass disinformation.

There are
currently
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many
measurements that could
be taken
to control the reliability of the material over the internet. The Ministry of Technologies and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Information
can play a crucial role in the security of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
by putting particular restrictions.
For instance
, they can sieve all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
it
is posted
. Strict penalties
also
should
be imposed
on the individuals and editorial offices posting
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
wrong
and incorrect info.
Furthermore
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
social networks provide humans with the ability of blocking inappropriate material.
For example
, if somebody posts deceitful
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
, users
are entitled
to complain about it to support service and ban the page.

To sum up, the Internet has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
of individuals and it remains the main source of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
, among which we can find
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
false data. In my view, human beings
eventually
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have to
decide whether to trust it or not.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay The internet is a great source of information and has opened up opportunities for people to learn all over the world. Is all information reliable on the internet? What could be done to control information online? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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