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Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. v.2

Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. v. 2
The career opportunities available for individuals in the country have changed significantly over the last decade. Some people argue that rather than focusing on a particular profession young people, mostly prefer to do multiple jobs which is considered as more beneficial than a single career option. To begin with, it is true that a large group of people were involved only in a single career during the early days. Focusing on a single career provides better job opportunities and relevant experience in that particular field. A wide number of opportunities are made available to the people and significant improvement in their profession can also be achieved, which thus help to earn high income. Moreover, some professions are time consuming, which takes a long period to complete the graduation and to attain sufficient field knowledge. For instance, the medical practitioners, including doctor and nurse, used to rely on a single career, because its study and practicing is a long time taking process. On the other hand, in the modern period, people prefer to follow multiple career for earning. Especially, the young people choose to work on different areas to acquire knowledge in all specific areas, which enable them to attain more job opportunities. In addition, the increased number of job vacancies is also a vital reason for this huge change and thus many countries encourage the young people to do multiple jobs, instead of focusing on a single career. For example, the European countries like Canada and Australia provide an opportunity to work part time jobs, which help them to earn more from different careers and to develop talent in different areas. In conclusion, during the earlier days, the people choose to focus only on a single career, whereas nowadays, the young, talented people are encouraged to variety of jobs and an opportunity to enhance their skills.
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available for individuals in the country have
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changed
significantly
over the last decade.
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people
argue that
rather
than focusing on a particular profession
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young
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people
,
mostly
prefer to do multiple
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jobs
which
is considered
as more beneficial than a
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single
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career
option.

To
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begin
with, it is true that a large group of
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people
were involved
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only
in a
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single
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career
during the early days. Focusing on a
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single
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career
provides better
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job
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opportunities
and relevant experience in that particular field. A wide number of
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opportunities
are made
available to the
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people
and significant improvement in their profession can
also
be achieved
, which
thus
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help
to earn high income.

Moreover
,
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some
professions are
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time consuming
, which takes a long period to complete the graduation and to attain sufficient field knowledge.
For instance
, the medical practitioners, including doctor and nurse,
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used
to rely on a
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single
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career
,
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because
its study and practicing is a long time taking process.

On the other hand
, in the modern period,
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people
prefer to follow multiple
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career
for earning.
Especially
, the
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young
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people
choose to work on
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different
areas to acquire knowledge in all specific areas, which enable them to attain more
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job
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opportunities
.
In addition
, the increased number of
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job
vacancies is
also
a vital reason for this huge
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change
and
thus
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many
countries encourage the
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young
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people
to do multiple
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jobs
,
instead
of focusing on a
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single
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career
.
For example
, the European countries like Canada and Australia provide an
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opportunity
to work
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part time
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jobs
, which
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help
them to earn more from
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different
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careers
and to develop talent in
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different
areas.

In conclusion
, during the earlier days, the
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people
choose to focus
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only
on a
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single
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career
, whereas nowadays, the
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young
, talented
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people
are encouraged
to variety of
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jobs
and an
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opportunity
to enhance their
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skills
.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
41Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
306 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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