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Generally, there are two types of guardians giving opinions about the whole life working style. Couple of them supports the idea to have only one sort of job at the same organization for the entire career, while other people suggest changing working places during their life. I keep both ideas equally and will try to illustrate clear reasons for it. v.1

Generally, there are two types of guardians giving opinions about the whole life working style. Couple of them supports the idea to have only one sort of job at the same organization for the entire career, while other people suggest changing working places during their life. I keep both ideas equally and will try to illustrate clear reasons for it. v. 1
Generally, there are two types of guardians giving opinions about the whole life working style. A couple of them supports the idea to have only one sort of job at the same organization for the entire career, while other people suggest changing working places during their life. I keep both ideas equally and will try to illustrate clear reasons for it. Firstly, everyone knows that a lot of citizens stay in the constant working position for a whole life after finishing their bachelor, master or other degree and also without a diploma either. As in my point of view, people chose to sacrifice all their time for one industry and organization in cases they do not have other alternatives because, for instance, someone lives in a rural area where he/she cannot be more than a teacher or do not have any skills despite dealing with document-papers. However, lots of engineers, managers and programmers work during the lifetime for large companies such as Microsoft, Google, Boeing out of the reason that they try to improve the world by working there and earn quite a solid finances to afford almost everything. Furthermore, it does not have to be so influential corporations, professionals can work stably at constant place if it satisfies their needs to be in high quality of living. In conclusion, I think that human beings should be adapted for investigations and must be keen on acquiring experience everywhere, but if they work for organizations which are related to improving our planet and the humankind as well, they should keep going there.
Generally
, there are two types of guardians giving opinions about the whole life
working
style. A couple of them supports the
idea
to have
only
one sort of job at the same organization for the entire career, while other
people
suggest changing
working
places during their life. I
keep
both
ideas
equally
and will try to illustrate
clear
reasons for it.

Firstly
, everyone knows that
a lot of
citizens stay in the constant
working
position for a whole life after finishing their bachelor, master or other degree and
also
without a diploma either. As in my point of view,
people
chose to sacrifice all their time for one industry and organization in cases they do not have other alternatives
because
,
for instance
, someone
lives
in a rural area where he/she cannot be more than a teacher or do not have any
skills
despite dealing with document-papers.
However
, lots of engineers, managers and programmers work during the lifetime for large
companies
such as Microsoft, Google, Boeing out of the reason that they try to
improve
the world by
working
there and earn quite a solid finances to afford almost everything.
Furthermore
, it does not
have to
be
so
influential corporations, professionals can work
stably
at constant place if it satisfies their needs to be in high quality of living.

In conclusion
, I
think
that human beings should
be adapted
for investigations and
must
be keen on acquiring experience everywhere,
but
if they work for organizations which
are related
to improving our planet and the humankind
as well
, they should
keep
going there.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay Generally, there are two types of guardians giving opinions about the whole life working style. Couple of them supports the idea to have only one sort of job at the same organization for the entire career, while other people suggest changing working places during their life. I keep both ideas equally and will try to illustrate clear reasons for it. v. 1

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261 words
6.5
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