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Write about the following topic. The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The internet has greatly increased our access to information. v. 23
Interent is a source for performing all the activities which you would like to do or assigned to do. Consider an Information technology company, where a developer has been assigned a task to develop a website but he is stuck somewhere and have no clue to get over it. The only option which could possibly come to his mind is "USE THE INTERNET". In terms of getting social connections, internet has become a media and a business for some social networking sites like facebook, Instagram app etc. People find friend, companies find data. The data which people will legally approve without even knowing where it can be used just to expose themselves socially. Internet is not only used for innovation but it can also be used for destruction. A dark web has a plathora of information which is just floating on the internet and people don't even know that what amount of there data is floating all around. Cyber crime has become very common which results into a big destruction eventually. From a kid to the old man, all uses interent for their entertainment but what happens behind? . Information. YES, the information which you feed to create an account is used. They are sold, they are sold to big companies to understand humans physicology, to create a market as per the individual needs. Information is sold for millions of dollers. In my opinion, considering above facts the access to the information should be limited. It should be only till the extent until it wont harm others. Infromation can make or break the society. So, we can conclude that if the access to information is not restricted on interent it may also break the society.
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Interent
is a source for performing all the activities which you would like to do or assigned to do. Consider an
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Information
technology
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company
, where a developer has
been assigned
a task to develop a website
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but
he
is stuck
somewhere and have no clue to
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get
over it. The
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only
option which could
possibly
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come
to his mind is
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"
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USE
THE INTERNET
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"
.

In terms of getting social connections, internet has become a media and a business for
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some
social networking sites like
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facebook
, Instagram app etc.
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People
find friend,
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companies
find data. The data which
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people
will
legally
approve without even knowing where it can be
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used
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just
to expose themselves
socially
.

Internet is not
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only
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used
for innovation
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but
it can
also
be
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used
for destruction. A dark web has a
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plathora
of
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information
which is
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just
floating on the internet and
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people
don't even know that what amount of
Did you mean "their"?
there
data is floating all around. Cyber crime has become
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very
common which results into a
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big
destruction
eventually
.

From a kid to the
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old
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man
, all
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uses
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interent
for their entertainment
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but
what happens behind?
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.
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Information
. YES, the
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information
which you feed to create an account is
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used
. They
are sold
, they
are sold
to
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big
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companies
to understand humans
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physicology
, to create a market as per the individual needs.
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Information
is sold
for millions of
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dollers
.

In my opinion, considering above facts the access to the
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information
should
be limited
. It should be
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only
till the extent until it
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wont
harm others.
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Infromation
can
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make
or break the society.
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So
, we can conclude that if the access to
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information
is not restricted on
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interent
it may
also
break the society.
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IELTS essay The internet has greatly increased our access to information.

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  American English
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285 words
5.5
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