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The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing? v.11

The internet has greatly increased our access to information. v. 11
The internet has become the main source to get detailed acquaintance because of advancement in the technology. But this might have severe effects and finance related issues may arise. The detailed reasons of its side-effects will be discussed in following paragraphs. Firstly, due to the advancement in the technics, a variety of devices has come into the market that provide the access to the web. Every person can deep dive into the news of the nation and the world with the help of online newspapers and social media channels in the form of content, audio and video. For example, "BBC News" the world's prominent news channel which offers news services through content, audio and videos. As a result, online websites act as a key to success for every individual to obtain data according to their need. However, the coin has two sides. In spite of the various advantages of using online data in order to utilize information, there are some severe and adverse effects of accessing online data. Almost every individual accesses the online tools to store his personal photos, important document, at the same time, dramatic rise has been found in cyber attacks whose aim is to steal people's personal data like credit card numbers and pins. For example, in 2018, Facebook was alleged to use the personal data of Cambridge Analytica for its own greed. Consequently, online availability of data has given birth to several problems. In the end, the utilization of online information is good as long as people will use this in limits. Therefore, they should avoid themselves to be entirely dependent on the web to get knowledge as a variety of books can be obtained from public and academic libraries to quench the thirst.
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get
detailed acquaintance
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because
of advancement in the technology.
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But
this might have severe effects and finance related issues may arise. The detailed reasons of its
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side-effects
will
be discussed
in following paragraphs.

Firstly
, due to the advancement in the
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technics
, a variety of devices has
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come
into the market that provide the access to the web. Every person can deep dive into the
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news
of the nation and the world with the
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help
of
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online
newspapers and social media channels in the form of content, audio and video.
For example
,
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"
BBC News
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"
the world's prominent
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news
channel which offers
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news
services through content, audio and videos.
As a result
,
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online
websites act as a key to success for every individual to obtain
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data
according to their need.

However
, the coin has two sides.
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In spite of
the various advantages of using
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online
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data
in order to utilize information, there are
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some
severe and adverse effects of accessing
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online
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data
. Almost every individual accesses the
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online
tools to store his personal photos,
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important
document, at the same time, dramatic rise has
been found
in
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cyber attacks
whose aim is to steal
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people
's personal
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data
like credit card numbers and pins.
For example
, in 2018, Facebook
was alleged
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
the personal
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data
of Cambridge Analytica for its
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own
greed.
Consequently
,
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online
availability of
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data
has
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given
birth to several problems.

In the
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end
, the utilization of
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online
information is
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good
as long as
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people
will
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use
this in limits.
Therefore
, they should avoid themselves to be
entirely
dependent on the web to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
knowledge as a variety of books can
be obtained
from public and academic libraries to quench the thirst.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay The internet has greatly increased our access to information. v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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